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The first line is borrowed from an old Quixillated poem...
What is poetry
What is poetry, if not word
whorls, worlds of imaginings,
the scent of a rose, of you,
in verse like whirling dervishes
trapped in the light?
What is it, but skirmishes
of syllable and rhyme
on pages set alight with the sight of you,
the light of you,
evening’s star first come to view?
With you, I begin anew.
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(08-01-2019, 08:23 PM)busker Wrote: The first line is borrowed from an old Quixillated poem...
What is poetry
What is poetry, if not word
whorls, worlds of imaginings,
the scent of a rose, of you,
in verse like whirling dervishes
trapped in the light?
What is it, but skirmishes
of syllable and rhyme
on pages set alight with the sight of you,
the light of you,
evening’s star first come to view?
With you, I begin anew.
Gotta admit, I was pretty thrilled with the rhyming of dervishes with skirmishes. For me this one ends at L10. The 4th and 5th eww rhyme in L11 feel like too much.
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(08-01-2019, 08:23 PM)busker Wrote: The first line is borrowed from an old Quixillated poem...
What is poetry
What is poetry, if not word
whorls, worlds of imaginings,
the scent of a rose, of you,
in verse like whirling dervishes
trapped in the light?
What is it, but skirmishes
of syllable and rhyme
on pages set alight with the sight of you,
the light of you,
evening’s star first come to view?
With you, I begin anew.
enjoyable little read, the last line feels a little cliche and detracts from the poem but it's no biggy
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Quix is an example of genuine artistic potential, because she has distinctive perspectives and angles of seeing; she feels what's present and also what's absent. Also, the heart is always there in her work -- it's not trying to be clever for the sake of being clever. She reminds us of how a poem doesn't have to be perfect to be beautiful.
For those of you who haven't seen it, her spotlit poem is haunting and visceral.
http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-19199.html
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(08-11-2023, 07:02 AM)Lizzie Wrote: Quix is an example of genuine artistic potential, because she has distinctive perspectives and angles of seeing; she feels what's present and also what's absent. Also, the heart is always there in her work -- it's not trying to be clever for the sake of being clever. She reminds us of how a poem doesn't have to be perfect to be beautiful.
For those of you who haven't seen it, her spotlit poem is haunting and visceral. http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-19199.html
The lone firefly hurrying by
Clouds like dragon heads
Yes, I remember those lines. Wonderful.
