Trip to the Supermarket

[heslopian]

An oasis in a desert's sphere,
the neon glare
of strip lighting.
The processed snacks are tall palm trees,
and I've been walking
so long now,
ridden with more sores
than a harem captive.
The universe is cold.
I've left the house,
I've pressed EJECT,
and now I grasp the arm rests
as I die in the vaccum of space.

[billy]

lot's to like with this jack.
the palm tree metaphor,

the last 5 lines could be a short poem on there own, though they work well in this one.
they're my faves. i'd put a 's after desert but it's no biggy,

great to see you putting one in
thanks for the read.

[heslopian]

Thank you so much for the feedback and kind words, Billy I'll make the edit once I've finished this.

[Ris Yerg]

Sad but truth!
R.Y.

[heslopian]

Thank you