Convincing the Alligator

[Mark A Becker]

Convincing the Alligator

When it's a long way to the door
and legs don't listen anymore
then what's a body language for?

[billy]

hi mark, i'm finding it a little ambiguous, i think what's happening here is that that there seems to be no need for a body that isn't mobile, if so it does work well

[Mark A Becker]

"... there seems to be no need for a body that isn't mobile..."

HA! That's (almost) too funny, Billy. Thanks.

Unfortunately, when that compromised, much less mobile body belongs to yours truly, then I better find a way to have a need for it.  Everyday I try to convince that "alligator" to walk like a reasonable facsimile of my former self.  My body's a goddamn traitor.

[billy]

i think you got the message across in the poem.

[RiverNotch]

feel like the third line doesn't need 'language' --- bluntness suits this piece's dark message. lovely, scary work, although my generally-paralyzed-by-diabetes grandfather seems to be living a happy enough life himself.

[Ally]

Hi Mark,

My mobility is compromised too, and I like your poem.

I'm interested in the alligator. I just watched 'Alligator Walking' on YouTube and I was reminded of my partner (we're a couple of croc(k)s, haha). I like your rhymes, and the regular line lengths.

Best wishes,
Ally

[pigpoem]

I had the image of a croc chasing and you giving up as you no you could not get away. reading the real reason brings true light to the poem. such short but powerful poetry. this is my first review on this site and I think I am going to enjoy my stay.

[Mark A Becker]

I may be bad at limping, but I'm still good at lying.