Cycles

[Keith]

Autumn licks the back of its transfers
and sticks decay onto cobblestones.

Another bike trail; blue sky pant,
keeps winter cramped

and summer's just a shout downstairs
for the warmth of a hot-water bottle.

[billy]

love the line and the 2nd, good images. would a semi colo work better than a comma after trail? and should it be summer's as in summer is. not sure about the summer's but felt i had to castigate you for it apart from the two nits it was delightful.

Autumn licks the back of its transfers
and sticks decay onto cobblestones.

Another bike trail, blue sky pant,
keeps winter cramped

and summers just a shout downstairs
for the warmth of a hot-water bottle.

[Keith]

love the line and the 2nd, good images. would a semi colo work better than a comma after trail? and should it be summer's as in summer is. not sure about the summer's but felt i had to castigate you for it apart from the two nits it was

Thanks for the help Billy, yes summer is, still looking at S2 but pleased S1 is working, I wasn't sure readers would get transfer. Best Keith