A Poet On Drums

[Tiger the Lion]

Wasn't exactly sure where to post this. There were a few sour threads where the idea of learning form had no value. I really didn't wanna resurrect any of those, so I guess this is an ok place for my response. 

A Poet On Drums

you start with a beat;

boom, boom-boom
boom, boom-boom
boom, boom-boom
boom, boom-boom

then learn the snare,

boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow

a little hi-hat to top the other two...

chit chit chit chit 
chit chit chit chit
chit chit chit chit 
chit chit chit chit

then,

boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow
boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow
boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow
boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow

till it's intuitive 

now you're splashing the cymbals
and thundering the toms, 

tinkering with the triangle,
and demanding more cowbell ,

knowing precisely when to rest.

[just mercedes]

Love this - the sounds are great.

Arise, Sir Ringo!

[ellajam]

and you don’t even have to be able to carry a tune.

[Keith]

This is just excellent, love how you layer the beats, really fresh and well done, like the rest in the end line too. Best Keith

[Magpie]

Brilliant onomata... onimata... onamitope... 

ah fuck it... 

Brilliant sonics and I especially like 

'tinkering with the triangle,
and demanding more cowbell'

[Knot]

Enjoyable piece Tiger,
with a good end line.
Couple of suggestions:
Have the 'beat' lines increase
over the course of the piece.

you start with a beat;
boom, boom-boom

then learn the snare,

boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow

...

do you need 'the other two...'? (L11)
Period after 'intuitive' ?

Do you need the 'ands' (L23/25)?

(Just a thought but, don't you
start with a count? ...3, 4)

Best, Knot.

[Thunderembargo]

Wasn't exactly sure where to post this. There were a few sour threads where the idea of learning form had no value. I really didn't wanna resurrect any of those, so I guess this is an ok place for my response. 

A Poet On Drums

you start with a beat;

boom, boom-boom
boom, boom-boom
boom, boom-boom
boom, boom-boom

then learn the snare,

boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow
boom pow, boom-boom pow

a little hi-hat to top the other two...

chit chit chit chit 
chit chit chit chit
chit chit chit chit 
chit chit chit chit

then,

boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow
boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow
boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow
boom chit-chit pow, chit-boom-boom, chit-pow

till it's intuitive 

now you're splashing the cymbals
and thundering the toms, 

tinkering with the triangle,
and demanding more cowbell ,

knowing precisely when to rest.

Cowbell.   Say no more.

[Namyh]

Tiger the Lion - I liked this story and the way it held together. Namyh