Halloween: the poet sees the end in apples

[busker]

Halloween: The poet sees the end in apples

Apples, bobbing 
in an ocean of pain. Twice the harrier
sorrow swooped in on my sobbing 
heart. Why don’t you love me, asks the meadow of the sky (it’s dark
and the sun has set on Sodom,
now heaven’s fire will make it warm),
the sky is silent, it knows G_d’s plan.

When I saw you with a man,
I knew it was time for brimstone
to fall 
on a burning hacienda.
It’s not natural, despite what they say,
the liberals with their gay 
agenda.

[Writerbyfire]

Halloween: The poet sees the end in apples

Apples, bobbing                                           
in an ocean of pain. Twice the harrier               // did you mean to enjamb these lines it feels like there should be a comma
sorrow swooped in on my sobbing                    // This enjambment feels more meaningful than the last
heart. Why don’t you love me, asks the meadow of the sky (it’s dark  // I'm thinking that the use of parentheses signals a change in speaker 
and the sun has set on Sodom,                                                      // or into inner monologue?
now heaven’s fire will make it warm),                                             // This is sort of defiant. I.e. chastising heat becomes your warmth
the sky is silent, it knows G_d’s plan.                    

When I saw you with a man,
I knew it was time for brimstone                         // I like this it sort of sparks excitement that ties into the defiance of the previous line
to fall 
on a burning hacienda.                                      // I'm not sure about the significance of hacienda it seems out of place 
It’s not natural, despite what they say,
the liberals with their gay 
agenda.

I really like the allusion of Sodom in fact it's essential. I really like the imagery of apples bobbing and twice the harrier. I imagine the speaker trying to futilely reach out (twice) and have the apples (the object of desire) be just out of reach. That being said I think your initial imagery (and title) gets overshadowed by the use of Christian imagery and reference. I thought "sea of pain" and "asks the meadow of the sky" was a bit too forced or perhaps cliche. I didn't feel much connect between the first and second stanzas but I really do like the second stanza. To me what it needs is a strong connector between your imagery and what you mean to communicate between the first and second stanza but it's also possible that cleaning up the imagery will do that by itself. There's lots of apocalyptic imagery which relates to "seeing the end" but I'm not seeing what the end is and how that comes from apples.