To A Righteous Man.

[billy]

"A nameplate or a symbolism is a mockery of free speech. The utterance of verbal
rectitude should have no namesake, or coat of arms." 18th century quote from an unknown soldier during the war of the Spanish succession.

A Righteous Man.

Nothing is free within the essence of "Demanding"
or at the end of a loaded war machine;
irrespective of it's warning charge.
Our vicious dog's of war have grown docile
teeth eroded with the sand of rhetoric.
Unleashed too late, they merely lick at festering leaks
wounds of more important wars.
Secret baubles broken, fallen snow globes
they splash the warm hearth during a fire side chit chat
and evaporate like gasoline.
To steal one man's secret and do with it what you will
can never be real freedom;
that can only come from the revelation
of one's own secrets.

[heslopian]

I don't know much about the wikileaks scandal, which is perhaps just as well, as it gives me a chance to review this poem on its aesthetic qualities alone, and on that basis I can say its very good, dark and powerful and true, and malleable enough to be applied to a variety of political events.

"A nameplate or a symbolism is a mockery of free speech. The utterance of verbal
rectitude should have no namesake, or coat of arms." 18th century quote from an unknown soldier during the war of the Spanish succession. Why is there a line break after "verbal"? Great epigram though.

A Righteous Man.

Nothing is free within the essence of "Demanding" Does "Demanding" need a capital letter and quotation marks? If this applies to a specific aspect of the scandal that I'm ignorant of then don't worry, but if it doesn't then it seems a bit blunt and unsubtle.
or at the end of a loaded war machine;
irrespective of it's warning charge. "It's" in this, the possessive context, shouldn't have an apostrophe.
Our vicious dog's of war have grown docile "Dog's" in the plural shouldn't have an apostrophe either.
teeth eroded with the sand of rhetoric. Perfect. A profound and beautiful metaphor.
Unleashed too late, they merely lick at festering leaks
wounds of more important wars.
Secret baubles broken, fallen snow globes
they splash the warm hearth during a fire side chit chat
and evaporate like gasoline. "Snow globes" sounds a bit contrived and cliche, but the rest is dynamite. Would it work better if you removed the snow globes and had the baubles fall instead, like this: "Secret baubles broken, scattering/the warm hearth during a fireside chit chat,/the shards evaporating like gasoline"?
To steal one man's secret and do with it what you will
can never be real freedom;
that can only come from the revelation
of one's own secrets. Great ending. Nicely sinister and polemical.

[billy]

yes to everything.

though i used snow globes because they splash when broken.

thanks for the grammar checks always a big help jack. i put you feedback into the edit which i'll do presently.

the quote somehow got screwed in the pating of of it.

thanks for the feedback jack.