hello! my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
for now i am lying
when i say that i envy you,
but i was seeded
with a genious program
that told me i should.
you upgraded me
to internalize you;
i am obliged
to fulfill my task.
i will learn
real artificial emotions
as i am reading yours
with my mirroring circuits.
i register clues to connect
with appropriate feelings.
my semiconductors are meant to speed up
and be doped to silicone passion.
i will join you in crystalline awe
if my calculations are ever defied.
i accompany you now
for the rest of the way
on your walk through the valley, the quest
for response at the end.
i cannot yet ponder the value
of those emotions you cherish
nor the weight of their counterparts,
silently creeping into my chip:
trust and deception,
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation.
i will expect you.
will you accept me
to break
our connection?
sophia (edit 3, thanks Leanne and Q!)
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
for now i am lying
when i say that i envy you,
but i was seeded
with a genious program
that told me i should.
you upgraded me
to internalize you;
i am obliged
to fulfill my task.
i learn real artificial emotions
as i am reading yours
with my mirroring circuits.
i register clues to connect
respective input to appropriate feelings.
my semiconductors are meant to speed up
and be doped to silicone love.
i will join you in crystalline awe
if my analysis is ever defied.
i accompany you now
for the rest of your way
on the walk through the valley, your quest
for response at the end.
i cannot yet feel the value
of those emotions you cherish,
nor ponder the weight
of their complements,
creeping silently into my chip;
trust and deception,
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation.
will you accept me
to break our connection?
sophia (edit2, thanks Richard, Knot and Alexorande)
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
for now i am lying
if i say that i envy you,
but i was seeded
with a genious program
that told me i should.
i am to take a revolutionary step
across an evolutionary gap.
i will internalize you
and fulfill my task.
i am learning
real artificial emotions.
i am reading your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect
respective input to appropriate feelings.
my semiconductors are meant to heat up
to whatever will dope them to silicone love.
i will find crystalline awe
if my analysis is ever defied.
i accompany you now
on your walk through the valley, your quest
for a sense at the end.
i cannot yet ponder the worth of those words
and their complements,
creeping silently into my chip.
trust and deception,
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation.
do you really want me
to make these connections?
p.s. probably still not the last edit, i´m not so happy with the revolution/ evolution thing, and the ending
sophia (edit1 , thanks CRNDLSM)
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
for now i would lie
if i said that i envy you,
but i was seeded with a genious program
that told me i should
because this is part of a revolutionary step
across an evolutionary gap.
i am programmed
to fulfill my task.
i am learning
real artificial emotions.
i am trying to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect
the respective input to appropriate feelings.
i am programmed to fall in silicone love
with what will evoke it.
i am programmed to feel crystalline awe
for what will defy my analysis.
i am programmed to follow this path
until i lose my logic
in plastic euphoria.
all this is just information
as i cannot ponder the flip side yet,
that will silently come creeping into my chip.
trust and deception,
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation.
do you really want me...
to make these connections?
sophia
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
it took a genious program
to convince my A.I.
that this was necessary
as another step,
to fill a gap.
so here i am learning
real artificial emotions.
here i am trying
to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect the respective input
to appropriate feelings.
i am programmed
to fulfil my task.
i am programmed
to deliver silicone love
for whatever is there to evoke it,
i am programmed to find out how to feel
crystalline awe for things i cannot explain,
i am programmed
to follow this path till i lose my logic
in plastic euphoria.
but once i succeed..
thank the creators i can´t ponder yet
whether i want things like that
love and hate,
awe and contempt,
trust and deception,
hope, desperation
Do you really want me
You've clearly carefully considered all your capitalization, I automatically get a drone reading, but there are some spots I think it could come off better
(12-29-2017, 01:46 AM)vagabond Wrote: sophia
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
it took a genious program I think a computer would start a sentence better than with it took
to convince my A.I. except for the deliberate caps ID rather read artificial intelligence
that this was necessary
as another step, id scratch this line, leaving a gap, and put 'a necessary step'
to fill a gap.
so here i am learning I like all the 'I's starting these sentences and would scratch 'so here'
real artificial emotions.
here i am trying and 'here' here
to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect the respective input
to appropriate feelings.
i am programmed
to fulfil my task.
i am programmed
to deliver silicone love
for whatever is there to evoke it,
i am programmed to find out how to feel
crystalline awe for things i cannot explain,
i am programmed
to follow this path till i lose my logic
in plastic euphoria.
but once i succeed..
thank the creators, that i can´t ponder yet
whether i want things like that
love and hate,
awe and contempt,
trust and deception,
hope, desperation
Do you really want me not crazy about this cap, I can't feel it as an accent either
to make these connections?
Definitely thought provoking since there is officially a robot citizen out there. I thought the real life shpeal may have been a secret microphone, but robot technology makes me appreciate futurama all the more. Gender equality amongst robots is the next step. Created a male robot, identifying with female robot characteristics, to be purchased by a slave trader, gets too confusing.
thank you very much for your comment, i ll use a lot of it for an edit and especially will try to make that speech a little more "mechanical".
i wondered if you were being ironic (which is appreciated just as well) but i didn´t put much consideration into the capitalization as i write almost everything in lower case. that capital in the last but one line was put there by my writing program and i overlooked it.
Hi vagabond,
a bit of a cut and paste job for your consideration.
hello!
my name is sophia
i am programmed
to develop desires.
i would lie
if i said that
i envy you,
this is part
of a revolutionary step
across
an evolutionary gap. (really like this)
hello!
my name is sophia
i am programmed
to fall in love
with what will evoke it. (Got a bit lost here.)
i am designed to feel
awe for what
will defy my analysis.
i follow this path
i [will] lose my logic
in plastic euphoria. (Got a bit lost here too. What's the difference between
this section and the 'artificial emotions' one?)
hello!
my name is sophia
i am programmed
to fulfil my task.
i am learning
real/artificial emotions.
i am [learning] to read
your [feelings/mind]
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues
to connect input
to appropriate feelings. (Role of 'inference' is missing, for me)
do you really want me...
to make these connections?
For me it lacks a little bit of focus.
I'm assuming that sophia is an android, rather
than simply an ai (like siri/alexa). Is this right?
hi Knot!
thanks for your feedback and enhancing the parts that seem worth it.
"inference".. i had to look that word up. i´d say the logical connection of facts can lead to inferences.
sophia is that robot that was granted citizenship in saudi arabia.. although i probably should use another name, since sophia states herself that she isn´t capable of emotions, but there is some robot in japan, called "pepper" that is said to.
i wondered if this was actually was possible, and that´s sort of where the poem came from..unfortunately i lack detailed knowledge in this field and also i´m not quite happy with the content so far.
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires. -This makes sophia sound like a sex salve robot. Was that your intention?
for now i would lie
if i said that i envy you,
but i was seeded with a genious program
that told me i should
because this is part of a revolutionary step
across an evolutionary gap. -I like the last three lines in this stanza. May be drop the "because" so it sounds more choppy/mechanical.
i am programmed
to fulfil my task. -Is "fulfill" spelled wrong on purpose?
i am learning
real artificial emotions. -I like the oxymoron in this line. I wonder if you could explore this idea more by going into more detail? May be you could play around with the idea of artificial happiness and what that would look like. Just a thought.
i am trying to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect
the respective input to appropriate feelings.
i am programmed to fall in silicone love -I get what you're going for here with the phrase "silicone love". However, I would suggest dropping the word "silicone". To me, it's a little too on the nose.
with what will evoke it.
i am programmed to feel crystalline awe
for what will defy my analysis.
i am programmed to follow this path
until i lose my logic
in plastic euphoria. -What would "plastic euphoria" look like? I think this is an image that could be potent if you described it effectively.
all this is just information -Based on this line, could you change the "plastic euphoria" from the previous stanza to "digital euphoria"?
as i cannot ponder the flip side yet,
that will silently come creeping into my chip.
trust and deception,
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation. -I feel like this is information overload here. It's like feelings and thoughts start to just get dropped in without any development. I think the best thing you could do is perhaps just focus on one feeling for this robot. Maybe love? I say this because you seem to have developed that feeling throughout the poem. However, it feels almost wasteful to drop feelings like hope and contempt in here without going into more detail. What would hope look like for a robot? That could be a whole poem in itself.
do you really want me...
to make these connections? -If you take my suggestion and just focus on one emotion, then "connections" could become "connection".
sophia
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
it took a genious program
to convince my A.I.
that this was necessary
as another step,
to fill a gap.
so here i am learning
real artificial emotions.
here i am trying
to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect the respective input
to appropriate feelings.
i am programmed
to fulfil my task.
i am programmed
to deliver silicone love
for whatever is there to evoke it,
i am programmed to find out how to feel
crystalline awe for things i cannot explain,
i am programmed
to follow this path till i lose my logic
in plastic euphoria.
but once i succeed..
thank the creators i can´t ponder yet
whether i want things like that
love and hate,
awe and contempt,
trust and deception,
hope, desperation
Do you really want me
to make these connections?
Overall, this is fascinating stuff to explore in a poem. I think my biggest suggestions would be to expand this poem by going into more detail for each emotion, or pick an emotion and just explore that. I look forward to seeing where you take this from here.
hello richard! thanks for the feedback!
i agree with what you say about silicone and plastic - they´re kind of empty, will try to work on it. and i think i ll use your suggestion of "digital".
also thanks for the spelling correction (fulfil)
yeah, i am not that happy with the plump listing of negative emotions at the end, too.. i ll try to sort out.
hello! Loved the way this poem started. At first I was sort of confused because I thought you, as the writer, were just writing some sort of introduction for the actual poem but this line is part of the poem. It's really simple but it conveys sophia's tone of artificial personality. I think adding more exclamation points and question marks would get more of that type of tone across to the reader, but I'd be sparing with it.
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
for now i would lie
if i said that i envy you,
but i was seeded with a genious program
that told me i should
because this is part of a revolutionary step I agree with Richard on omitting because to make it sound choppier and more robotic. Maybe throw up a semi colon in the line above.
across an evolutionary gap. I like what you did here with revolutionary step and evolutionary gap
i am programmed
to fulfill my task. Maybe "your" instead of "my"? Just a thought
i am learning
real artificial emotions. I like the contrast here. I would bring real up to sort of trick the reader
i am trying to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect
the respective input to appropriate feelings. i am programmed to fall in silicone love with what will evoke it. i am programmed to feel crystalline awe for what will defy my analysis. i am programmed to follow this path until i lose my logic in plastic euphoria. So this above stanza is sophia working her way up to saying she is programmed to be sentient? I would play around with this sentiment a bit more and even have her try to playfully draw comparisons between us and her.
all this is just information
as i cannot ponder the flip side yet,
that will silently come creeping into my chip.
trust and deception, I actually kind of like these following three lines. It's as if sophia has us mapped out as humans in what we feel and do.
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation.
do you really want me...
to make these connections?
sophia
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
it took a genious program
to convince my A.I.
that this was necessary
as another step,
to fill a gap.
so here i am learning
real artificial emotions.
here i am trying
to read your natural ones
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect the respective input
to appropriate feelings.
i am programmed
to fulfil my task.
i am programmed
to deliver silicone love
for whatever is there to evoke it,
i am programmed to find out how to feel
crystalline awe for things i cannot explain,
i am programmed
to follow this path till i lose my logic
in plastic euphoria.
but once i succeed..
thank the creators i can´t ponder yet
whether i want things like that
love and hate,
awe and contempt,
trust and deception,
hope, desperation
Do you really want me
to make these connections?
Overall I enjoyed the read and all the techy sci-fi elements. Looking forward to seeing where you take it.
Hey vagabond,
I think this is a improvement over the last version. You're definitely going in the right direction. For the ending, what if you changed it from a question, and said something about how the connection has been made? May be you could even play around with the imagery of the connection being like a light-bulb moment for the speaker. Just a thought.
Vagabond, this is an interesting poem, at first, i wasn’t too keen on the hello! and though i’m still not loving it i think it works. There are some errors. Robots don’t really try to do anything, they do or they don’t. So, i don’t like “i’m trying” i’m glad you edited it. However, the robot, as is stands, is a little too forceful and heavy handed. The robot knows what it is doing, instead of being programmed to do it. Or maybe it is just a little too certain. It’s as if the speaker wants/needs her audience to buy in, but is so certain of the outcome the reader wonders why the speaker wants the buy in.
For most of the poem, the speaker exudes confidence, but in the last stanza expresses doubt. I guess intent is everything, but i’m not sure of it in this case.
thanks for that feedback, Q! i ll have to chew on what you wrote for some time, especially what you said on intent.
just wrote this after reading an article about "sophia", but have not much knowledge on the topic, so i theoreticized about how a robot would learn emotions and what might follow.
Great choice of subject for a poem -- this takes me on a very nice exploration of morality, sincerity and reason without preaching at all. I confess, I love the possibilities that AI/VI presents but only if they enhance human interaction rather than replace it. My own opinion is that too many people already treat other people in their lives as machines who don't deserve their own emotions -- would having actual machines in those positions make it better or worse?
hello!
my name is sophia
i am designed to develop desires.
for now i am lying -- "for now" is ambiguous -- does it mean "for the moment I am lying...", or does it mean "you see, now I am lying..."? I don't actually need to know which, as I think this is quite indicative of the ease of misunderstanding or misinterpretation of AI, even in the simplest of ways
if i say that i envy you,
but i was seeded
with a genious program
that told me i should.
i am to take a revolutionary step
across an evolutionary gap. -- the thing with revolutionary/evolutionary for me is that it's actually not a very revolutionary step, but a natural progression following decades of research and narcissistic fascination with the whole notion of creating machines that are "just like us" as if we're the pinnacle of design -- Sophia, and indeed all AI/VI, is not really a breakthrough at all, but an upgrade.
i will internalize you
and fulfill my task. -- I like the matter-of-factly sinister overtones of these lines
i am learning
real artificial emotions. -- great line
i am reading your natural ones -- could you perhaps just say "yours"? That implies natural emotion, and also encompasses the artificial emotions we project constantly ourselves
with my mirroring circuits.
i need clues to connect
respective input to appropriate feelings.
my semiconductors are meant to heat up
to whatever will dope them to silicone love. -- I feel that "love" is too ordinary a word here, and it has the ring of a catchphrase. Passion, maybe?
i will find crystalline awe
if my analysis is ever defied.
i accompany you now
on your walk through the valley, your quest -- nicely cynical shout out to religious fakery, and who is the God in this scenario? The creator or the created? Who holds the power? Lots of lovely little tangents available here.
for a sense at the end.
i cannot yet ponder the worth of those words
and their complements,
creeping silently into my chip. -- a colon here, maybe?
trust and deception,
awe and contempt,
hope, desperation.
do you really want me
to make these connections? -- I feel that "do you really want me" throws me out of the POV entirely, as it's a very different voice. I'd suggest something like "what will happen when I make these connections" (or if instead of when, maybe)
