By My Math
#1
By My Math
 
I love you almost absolutely.
 
You've grown on me and quite astutely
measured me for what I am—
 
nearly double half a man.
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#2
I love this.

Absolutely/astutely and man/am are quite pleasing -- not too close, not too far.

The sentiment is lovely without being sappy. Speaks to me of love that's flawed but true.
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#3
reminded me of...




I fell in love with a girl
She was 67 inches tall
Took every pound I had
Left me without a foot to fall on

I thought it was imperial love
She was my queen
Ended so metrically
So precise and so clean

Now she's a thousand thousand meters away
I can't measure my love.
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#4
Thanks Lizzie. I considered leaving the end a half foot short to further emphasize my point, but I couldn't make it work.
@Shem. Interesting tune. I'll take it as a compliment.  Thumbsup
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#5
(12-18-2017, 09:04 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Thanks Lizzie. I considered leaving the end a half foot short to further emphasize my point, but I couldn't make it work.

I think it's perfect. In tone and subject, it reminds me of Robert Lowell.
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