Unboxing

[Wjames]

She arrived from Amazon
with cellophane on her skirt
and her lips painted flawless
pink petals.

Now there are fingerprints
below her eyes, and her thighs
are scratched red.

I wish I'd made a video.

[just mercedes]

I love this extended metaphor! Maybe that final line should be 'I wish I'd made a video' or 'I should have made a video'. But great, thanks for posting!

[RiverNotch]

extended metaphor

RealDoll begs to differ.

Although I do agree that the tense of the last line is a bit off.

[just mercedes]

extended metaphor

RealDoll begs to differ.

Although I do agree that the tense of the last line is a bit off.

I read this as - N gets a new book from Amazon, and it's like getting a sex doll - his to violate, open, penetrate.
And both show signs of his invasion.

After you commented I tried to reread it unmetaphorically. But it still works as an extended metaphor, doesn't it? N gets a sex doll from Amazon, and it's like violating, opening and penetrating, a new book. And both show signs of his invasion.

It's because Amazon, for me, is only about books. 

[Keith]

Great visual poem, maybe "she was Amazon" just to add some mystique, your poem. The use of and in L2 S2 makes the line work on two levels, I like that even though it made me stumble at first read. I'd in the last line. Best Keith

[Wjames]

Thanks for your thoughts, I love writing short ones like this that come all at once. I'll fix the last sentence.