One Room Schoolhouse- an homage to Dylan Thomas

[homer1950]

It was my understanding that is not failed
took to my knowing from early age schoolhouse did
    And the books piled and the room
            insisted more
        The teacher beckons
With order saying and call of schoolbell and look
And the smell of school books on the hard wood desk
        Myself to get took
            That second
to the still teaching room and set down.

    My first day began with the room-
kids and the older kids of the advanced years calling my name
    Around the pole and the white flag
            And I rose
        In doing homage
And talked toward it a crowd of all my peers.

[Yjack123]

First of all, it's peers, not piers, unless you're at the boat dock.  I also don't really think you went to a one room school (although I might be wrong).  This, to me, feels like it's missing the honesty of actual experience.  I didn't feel like I was there.  Also when I read it aloud it felt rough and stumbling.  It's a good idea that, I think, just needs a little more emotion and connection.  Just my opinion.

[homer1950]

Thanks for the spelling correction.