Tony Was Yelling, and My Name's Sue!

[Solstice]

Sometimes self defense comes from the top down,
Like digging utensils, you can keep heeling,
A flying thwack, to the solid state,
Of our perceptions, young wooden
Double edge swords stuck
Between arm and rib, where that true metal
Scarred me, and made me bitter, unlike
The amateur porn that she had only half
A heart to see me watch.

I guess there were a few chases,
A few, well, chases, and I don't like
The name Sue.

[CRNDLSM]

This reminds me of Johnny Cashs 'Sue' getting into a bar fight with pool sticks.

Sometimes self defense comes from the top down,
Like digging utensils, you can keep heeling, interesting choice heeling.
A flying thwack, to the solid state,
Of our perceptions, young wooden
Double edge swords stuck
Between arm and rib, where that true metal
Scarred me, and made me bitter, unlike
The amateur porn that she had only half
A heart to see me watch. I think I get the fast paced run on for conversational tones, but the capitalization of words at the beginning come off as random and distracting between the commas as opposed to the uniform aesthetics of 1st letters which I don't think add any flare, but if it's your signature, it is what it is.

I guess there were a few chases,
A few, well, chases, and I don't like I like the 'well' necessary to be conversational and split up the meaning of chases
The name Sue.