Confession

[Tiger the Lion]

Confession
 
“WHAT IS IT ABOUT HER, PAUL?”
 
It’s too dear a secret to me
to confess to a man
I can’t be sure I know.
 
It’s between me and God
and I’m in enough trouble already,
 
so I tell the priest
she’s a good girl.

[vagabond]

Confession
 
“WHAT IS IT ABOUT HER, PAUL?”
 
It’s too dear a secret to me
to confess to a man
I can’t be sure I know.
 
It’s between me and God
and I’m in enough trouble already,
 
so I tell the priest
she’s a good girl.

and he shall be a good boy in the eyes of the fathers (at least one of them, maybe both)
nice poem!

[Quixilated]

Hello, Tiger,  I like this one quite a lot.  

I'm not sure the first line should be in all caps.  It makes me feel like the speaker is shouting.  Perhaps he is supposed to have a booming voice, as some who preach professionally do?  But though I've never been to one, I always imagined a conversation in a confessional to be held in hushed tones.  

And then also I find myself wishing the last line could also be spoken aloud by adding quotation marks.  "she's a good girl."  But I read it that way even without them so.

I especially love the lines, "It's too dear a secret to me" and "I'm in enough trouble already."    The first is beyond sweet and the second made me grin.  I read this and it makes me think about how love can sometimes feel like it has it's own law and is it's own religion, that it can be too holy to be any business of a mere priest.  Anyway, I'm a fan.  

--Quix

[nibbed]

Hi Tiger the lion

Confession
 
“WHAT IS IT ABOUT HER, PAUL?”
 
It’s too dear a secret to me
to confess to a man
I can’t be sure I know.
 
It’s between me and God
and I’m in enough trouble already,
 
so I tell the priest
she’s a good girl.


I want to embrace the charm of the poem, there seems to be an intent of charm...but I am troubled over the creepiness of the whole confessional scene where the subject is asked to spill his beans to a hidden man. Such a leading question, too. Once again, a pome that goes in many directions!

Hope your day is great!
janine