No One Reads My Poems But Google

[rowens]

Everybody's kind of lame,
you can see it in their eyes
when they're talking to other people.
I laugh because it eases pain,
not because it's funny.
I smile when I'm embarrassed.

Being a human's humiliating;
if you can't do something
to overcome your natural condition,
you might as well get a job.

Time slows down
when the sun shines and it's warm.
You might not think so; but I do.
We don't have to be enough
alike to disagree.

Someone on the phone says,
"Yes, it is a beautiful day today,"
instantly they're sad and don't know why.
But it's obvious to see
the confused reflection in their eyes.

[rowens]

The semicolon in that line is because the pause should be longer to indicate a distance. I often do that, make distinctions between things with a semicolon. Making hard distinctions. It's something I made up, and usually there's no reason for anyone to notice unless it's made to stand out. When you see a sign like a semicolon you feel it in your reading and you go on, rather than taking the trouble to actually pause. You feel the logic of the pause and go on.

The comma at the end of the quotation carries on with the rest of the sentence. Anyway, I don't want a sentence started and the emphasis of sound the beginning of a new sentence requires. I don't want an 'and' either, as in, 'and instantly...'

Things can make sense here, even in context, but they don't have to. Everything's all right with me, even if it makes me sound ignorant.

[rowens]

I'm working my way as a Southern writer, and every sign I might be proselytizing some state of ignorance is my hurry route to credibility. The best way I see how to do it is to be criticized, yet championed. Southern gals are romantic. They keep telling me I'm too smart for them. I assume smart is a current and clever day euphemism for ugly.

So accusing someone of calling me ignorant is my way of sounding sympathetic.

[ellajam]

I assume smart is a current and clever euphemism for ugly.

ha, if you were a girl that would be old news.

[rowens]

In the old days they just said ugly. They must've matured.

But maybe you meant something else.

[ellajam]

Just that smart was not the sought after comment a young girl wanted aimed at them. The girls i know now seem to be a little more self-assured.

[rowens]

It must have been that Christina Aguilera song that did it.

[Truerenigma]

The semicolon in that line is because the pause should be longer to indicate a distance. I often do that, make distinctions between things with a semicolon. Making hard distinctions. It's something I made up, and usually there's no reason for anyone to notice unless it's made to stand out. When you see a sign like a semicolon you feel it in your reading and you go on, rather than taking the trouble to actually pause. You feel the logic of the pause and go on.

The comma at the end of the quotation carries on with the rest of the sentence. Anyway, I don't want a sentence started and the emphasis of sound the beginning of a new sentence requires. I don't want an 'and' either, as in, 'and instantly...'

Things can make sense here, even in context, but they don't have to. Everything's all right with me, even if it makes me sound ignorant.

Wow, you made up parataxis and hypotaxis? It's a valid enough technique. The poem is readable.

[bena]

I ADORE the title and wish I'd thought of it first, I'm so jealous.

You know I love you, and I'm a southern gal ...I like my men to be intelligent. Sex is good and all, but what do you talk about the next 23 hours of the day? I need a smart man.

Back to the poem...I think it is wonderful...shows the depression in a way that I can relate to. Been there, ,....ect.

love ya,
mel.

[rowens]

Wow, you made up parataxis and hypotaxis? It's a valid enough technique. The poem is readable.

Just because I make something up doesn't mean it isn't true.

I can be more extreme. If I say, you and me, and I really don't like somebody, I might say, you; and me. But of course I would never really do that. If I didn't like somebody why would I say you and me about them? Though superstition has its place in grammatical sense.

I ADORE the title and wish I'd thought of it first, I'm so jealous.

You know I love you, and I'm a southern gal ...I like my men to be intelligent. Sex is good and all, but what do you talk about the next 23 hours of the day? I need a smart man.

Back to the poem...I think it is wonderful...shows the depression in a way that I can relate to. Been there, ,....ect.

love ya,
mel.

Then again, if it's a manic depression you can sometimes have sex on into those other 23 hours too. Especially in spring. Or you're at least out trying to find somebody to do it with.

[ellajam]

Smart's a funny word. Smart about getting along with poeople, smart with tools but can't spell, I don't have any problem with that.

And who stubbed their toe and first said "Ouch, that smarts"?

The Dalai Lama may be a happy genius, but he's the exception.

Your poem, while I like it all, my favorite line is

"We don't have to be enough
alike to disagree."

It's interesting enough that I had to keep turning it over in my mind. It goes to the heart of a specific kind of relation, one that I love for it's challenges in some areas and total lack of them in others.

As usual, so glad you posted.

[ellajam]

Ha, I saw google reading this thread so I took a look. I'll have to thank them, I enjoyed the read, especially

We don't have to be enough
alike to disagree.

Someone on the phone says,
"Yes, it is a beautiful day today,"
instantly they're sad and don't know why.

[Todd]

One of the best modern titles for a poem.