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Forgot to put the garbage out,
oh hell to pay.
Why does marriage have to be this way?
Can't be arsed to walk the dog
but I'll do it any way
because he always loves me,
sleet or shine,
still wags his little tail
when I'm drinking too much wine.
My wife has morphed into a porcupine.
However I treat him, he loves me
just the same,
so I treat him fine, I treat him fine.
My shrink has blocked me from his private line.
My wife, she's morphed into a porcupine.
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Quote:My shrink has blocked me from his private line.
My wife, she's morphed into a porcupine.
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thanks for the giggle Wastrel, dogs don't judge, they just bite if you piss them off.
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Lots we as humans can learn from dogs. They are certainly more patient and forgiving. Last line certainly capture that I spouse can drive us crazy. lot of the dog more about your experience with the wife will humanize this piece even more. I like the imagery and I like the reality that I took away that we are less careful about what we say and how we treat people that we know very well. Perhaps we should think about that more and change our ways. This certainly makes me think and that is a good thing.
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Aw...thanks Ellajam, Keith and TMKMarketing! :-)
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Hi,
I really like how you included lines with concert details that offer a window into your life, such as "when I'm drinking too much wine." and "My shrink has blocked me from his private line." It is slightly confusing when you are talking about your dog vs your wife even though they are different genders. Maybe consider breaking the poem up into multiple stanzas to separate the different components?
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Hi Rose - The poem wasn't intended to be serious, which is why I posted it in Fun. I have to confess I put zero effort into it and just wrote something daft that sort of rhymed. That said, thank you for reading it and leaving some thoughtful comments. I might come back and look at it with different glasses - so thank you! By the way, I don't have a dog or a wife or a shrink, but the narrator in the poem does. I think his name could be Geoff! :-)
