—tofu pie—

[Lizzie]

mother's making tofu pie—
two spoons honey
carob not cocoa
four spoons butter
     two of them peanut

she's glowering at the stove
slamming pans

we dread dinnertime

we can eat our vegetables
only after the pie

[kolemath]

this is fun, hence the forum choice i know. but still, i love the contradictions and irony

mother's making tofu pie—
two spoons honey
carob not cocoa can hear mother's voice here, health nut?
four spoons butter
     two of them peanut good line break and syntax jumble

she's glowering at the stove glowering didn't fit to my first reading, but I like the idea
slamming pans good sounds and multiple meanings

we dread dinnertime

we can eat our vegetables
only after the pie another clever flip

[ellajam]

Might have helped if it made mom happy, sounds like she might need some animal protein and a brownie. My condolences to the N and all involved.

[Lizzie]

Ellajam: yes, brownies always help. The N gratefully accepts your condolences.

Kolemath: How the hell are ya? Is this what happens with you when you write a good poem or two? You hit the sidelines for a while? The game ain't over, son!

Did you think that glowering didn't work tonally, maybe? Thanks for the crit!

[kolemath]

Lizziep! My university gave me a bunch of money do develop a course with content from the Creative Commons. Heard of it?

I know, i know....lameeeeeeeeeeeee excuse

[Lizzie]

Lizziep!  My university gave me a bunch of money do develop a course with content from the Creative Commons.  Heard of it?

I know, i know....lameeeeeeeeeeeee excuse

I see how it is....you've become to busy and important for us.

Well, I expect poems about all of your amazing experiences when you get back.

[kolemath]

So I couldn't get glowering out of my head yesterday..

Poetry about textbooks...Would you want to read that??

[Lizzie]

So I couldn't get glowering out of my head yesterday..

Poetry about textbooks...Would you want to read that??

In a bad way??? Ha, at least it's memorable.

Sure, I'd read it. But, only if there are cockroaches.

[Quixilated]

I love this! Especially the irony of the children longing to be allowed to eat their vegetables (I mean, that's when you know it's bad, right? "please can we just eat our broccoli now?") but mom is forcing them to eat "pie" first. Pie should only be a happy word!!!! It's just so wrong and so backwards and those poor children. Well captured, well ordered, well phrased.

[Lizzie]

Thanks for the thumbs up, Miss Quix.