︻╦̵̵͇̿̿̿̿╤─── Third World

[tidalnymph]

I have once walked with you...

Barefooted; on my tiny, restless feet there amongst the beggars, the homeless, the hopeless, the faithless, the criminals, the fucked-up beautiful faces and the many different varieties of the whores and prostitutes of the world. My first kiss was from a thief who stole my heart and left me alone walking heartless and bare-naked, exposing myself to everyday filth, diseases, corruption and general life contamination and fuckery. All of this unbeknownst to me, and I wouldn't have made it if it's not for you and your love... And so what if it's rough? I figured anyways that such body as mine, is made for raw and savage way of loving and I wouldn't have want it in any other way... And there in your nasty dangerous streets I've learned to suck all up my fears and tears and just continue walking even though I don't really know where to go or what to do exactly (or whether i could make it or not, really...)
And though I'm not with you anymore I would never forget the fact that I have once walked with you...
Yes, I have once walked and loved with you---

on my tired, dirty little feet...

[billy]

I have once walked with you...

Barefooted; on my tiny, restless feet there amongst the beggars, the homeless, the hopeless, the faithless, the criminals, the fucked-up beautiful faces and the many different varieties of the whores and prostitutes of the world. My first kiss was from a thief who stole my heart and left me alone walking heartless and bare-naked, exposing myself to everyday filth, diseases, corruption and general life contamination and fuckery. All of this unbeknownst to me, and I wouldn't have made it if it's not for you and your love... And so what if it's rough? I figured anyways that such body[ b]a[/b] as mine, is made for the raw and savage way of loving and I wouldn't have wanted it in any other way... And there in your nasty dangerous streets I've learned to suck all up my fears and tears and just continue walking even though I don't really know where to go or what to do exactly (or whether i could make it or not, really...)
And though I'm not with you anymore I would never forget the fact that I have once walked with you...
Yes, I have once walked and loved with you---

on my tired, dirty little feet...

i like it tidal though i think it could do wit a little work on the grammar (something i'm not that good at )
i like the machine gun in the title.
some good lines in the piece

thanks for the read.

[tidalnymph]

glad you liked it! many thanks (and i'd still be polishing it, to make it better..)

[addy]

Interesting read... liked the train of thought narrative. The image of bare feet (to suggest hardship, but also "nakedness"/openness/innocence) was nicely done