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A Toast to the New Year
Now once again as in the past,
the time has come, but will not last,
So let us toss out all our fears,
and welcome in the coming year.
And let us leave no unturned stone,
of sins to others, let's now atone,
and leave our anger, hate and strife,
within the fold of coming night.
And with a smile upon our face,
no matter that it seems misplaced,
lets pledge together this one thing,
only joy to others bring.
erthona
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(12-31-2016, 11:11 PM)Erthona Wrote: A Toast to the New Year
Now once again as in the past,
the time has come, but will not last,
So let us toss out all our fears,
and welcome in the coming year.
And let us leave no unturned stone,
of sins to others, let's now atone,
and leave our anger, hate and strife,
within the fold of coming night.
And with a smile upon our face,
no matter that it seems misplaced,
lets pledge together this one thing,
only joy to others bring.
erthona
©2001
(01-01-2017, 05:03 AM)tectak Wrote: (12-31-2016, 11:11 PM)Erthona Wrote: A Toast to the New Year
Now once again as in the past,
the time has come, but will not last,
So let us toss out all our fears,
and welcome in the coming year.
And let us leave no unturned stone,
of sins to others, let's now atone,
and leave our anger, hate and strife,
within the fold of coming night.
And with a smile upon our face,
no matter that it seems misplaced,
lets pledge together this one thing,
only joy to others bring.
erthona
©2001
Holy shit, Curmudgeon...are you all right?
Assuming the Prozac is enduring, then Happy New Year to you too.
Best,
very best,
tectak
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Genuinely moved by this one, Dale. I love that 'coming night' can be interpreted as New Year's Eve or as all of our impending deaths.
Happy New Year! >  <
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Thanks Tom and lizziep.
dale
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Nothing original, nothing groundbreaking, but a familiar notion a trillions times felt portrayed in an easy to understand, lovely to read and simple but effective way. Really enjoyed it, Bravo! Great stuff.
RBJ
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A Toast to the New Year
Now once again as in the past,
the time has come, but will not last, "but will not last" seems only for the sake of rhyme
So let us toss out all our fears,
and welcome in the coming year. i´d erase "and"
And let us leave no unturned stone,
of sins to others, let's now atone, i ´d erase "now"
and leave our anger, hate and strife,
within the fold of coming night. maybe "parting night" since you cannot leave something in the future
And with a smile upon our face,
no matter that it seems misplaced, "if" instead of "that"?
lets pledge together this one thing,
only joy to others bring.
i appreciate rhyme (if you remember), so i like that poem.
but not above meaning/ message, so i don´t like it a lot.
few suggestions as i am supposed to give constructive criticism
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Wow, sweet to see this little gem
resurface that I would have missed,
thanks to vagabond's critique.
good message,
thank you!
there's always a better reason to love
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