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Say Something
I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space?
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what
you say.
The original thread and comments can be found here
*Note from Admin: This poem was originally posted in the "For Fun" forum, and the comments were delivered in the spirit of fun; however, this is a poem to which I have returned numerous times and each time the effect has been different.
Sometimes, we just can't predict what's going to work for us. This works, and I know I'm not alone in thinking that. Cheers Kolemath! ~ Leanne
It could be worse
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I will admit that this is one I've come back to a few times (which in itself probably makes the poem more successful than most). It might surprise Kole that this is the one that got spotlighted, but I can see why it was. Nice choice Leanne!
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Kole really does some excellent work in the "For Fun" forum. Well, deserved. Congratulations, Kole!!! >
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I enjoy this every time, it speaks to my state of mind.
It's a joy watching kolemath use the site so well.
Congrats!
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I, too, like this. Maybe empty minds think alike!
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Totally agree with this choice. I read it in critique but had nothing to offer. It's concise and thoughtful.
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(11-09-2016, 05:14 AM)Leanne Wrote: Say Something
I wrote a verse
then erased it.
Here it is.
Do you like it?
The silence? The purity of space?
The blather doesn't blah-blah
the space of what you say.
The original thread and comments can be found here
*Note from Admin: This poem was originally posted in the "For Fun" forum, and the comments were delivered in the spirit of fun; however, this is a poem to which I have returned numerous times and each time the effect has been different.
Sometimes, we just can't predict what's going to work for us. This works, and I know I'm not alone in thinking that. Cheers Kolemath! ~ Leanne
even if billy says his muse is gone, he can still bemuse a poem.
http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-19569.html :D
thanks for the spotlight, leanne! it will be listed with other achievements in my obituary
Thanks to this Forum
