Choice Words

[kolemath]

EDIT1

It’s not called war anymore,
the killing of one nation for another nation killing:
 
neutralize, administrative, politics.
 
The lexicon abstracts and calls on fades of image,
while sarin in the soil rests a pink-bead bracelet over bleaching bone. 
 
Dick stiffs for enhanced interrogation.
Obomba blows for drone targets.
 
Kinetic action or extraordinary rendition from a black site to detention camp: 
I’ll kill or kidnap from this foreign hell hole to a prison delivery:

diplomacy.


FIRST DRAFT

It’s not called war anymore,
the killing of one nation of another nation killing:
 
neutralize, administrative, politics.
 
The lexicon abstracts and calls on blurring fades of image,
while sarin in the soil rests a pink-bead bracelet over bleaching bone.
 
Diplomacy.

[rowens]

I think this is a good poem. It lets you down, but a poem like this should. It kind of leaves you flat. Dead, and you forget about it. I think it would make a good opener in a poem collection. To leave you flat and interested.

[CRNDLSM]

It’s not called war anymore,
the killing of one nation of another nation killing:
 'The killing of one nation for another nation's killing'
Sounds better to me, but your way sounds like yadayadayada, like your rolling your eyes to the subject which I think may also be appropriate
neutralize, administrative, politics.
 
The lexicon abstracts and calls on blurring fades of image,
while sarin in the soil rests a pink-bead bracelet over bleaching bone. I like how fades is the noun and abstracts the verb because it forces me to think differently, but since fades and blurry are so close in meaning maybe switching won't hurt.  'The lexicon fades and calls on blurring abstracts of image.  Cause abstract isn't necessarily blurry already. Then again, they are your choice words...

Diplomacy.

No matter, enjoyed the reading, thanks! 

[kolemath]

thanks for the comments, especially the one on taking the long view, rowens. i see what you mean crn about the redundancy of blur and fade.

expanded edit posted. seems like an orwell quote might be a good epigraph..