Explicit 'Something About Abortion'

[CRNDLSM]

Something About Abortion

I am an only child
and don't have many friends.
My folks were always busy;
I didn't really know them.

My mother was young;
my dad was in love.
But, my brother's dad, he was just an ass.

She was scared and ashamed,
and couldn't tell her family,
but she got her older brother
to take care of everything.

I'm not sure how I found out.
It must have just slipped out
during a fight that I was hanging around . . . 

I couldn't tell you where she comes from
but she's not the only one.
My mother's first born
was an abortion.

No persecution
for committing any crimes,
just the regrets buried deep inside.

I had a brother
but I didn't know him.
Sometimes I wonder
how it would have been.

[pinkalligator]

I really like this but I feel like it could be more emotionally engaging

[CRNDLSM]

I think its charm is in the fact that it's not; even the title is emotionally distant.  Tell a simple story from a simple person, and the reader fills in their own feels
I read a poem called '40 million dead since roe v wade'  and even though it rhymed and was full of data, I could not take it seriously.
This subject is so politically charged in America, I'm trying to show the best side is no side.  I sure as hell won't encourage abortion for anyone, but I sure as hell won't hate them for it either.

Thanks for reading!

I really like this but I feel like it could be more emotionally engaging

[Achebe]

I sure as hell won't encourage abortion for anyone, but I sure as hell won't hate them for it either.

I would, though, the world needs fewer people. 
The poem would work better if it did not read as a series of statements. Perhaps you could throw in some enjambment there.

[CRNDLSM]

I sure as hell won't encourage abortion for anyone, but I sure as hell won't hate them for it either.

I would, though, the world needs fewer people. 
The poem would work better if it did not read as a series of statements. Perhaps you could throw in some enjambment there.

That makes sense, I will see what I can do.  Thank you!

[FilthyDeluxe]

I like the emotional distance it creates. It has a feel like it just would've been interesting to have a sibling. Like the reader is on the outside looking in with curiosity and not much else.