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The breakers rage. Percussion punctuates
your scratchings on the sand and brings to me
their strings, untied and I begin to see
macrame patterns knotted through the straits.
The poetry you lost, it oscillates
between the peaks and troughs of what will be,
so I shall stand beside this distant sea
to watch the weave. The thread is with the Fates.
There are no sirens; muses never sing,
the sounds we hear are nothing more than air:
just waves. Not all will resonate. Not all
will find an ear, but some will rise and ring
through time, if poets dream and poets dare
to listen to the wind. I hear your call.
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some good images no feedback really cos it's in misc and i don't have to
. i would be upset if it were not a good sonnet but it is a good sonnet. the macrame pattern i found to be superb
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Yep, misc so nobody feels like they're being tested and graded, god forbid eh? I would be upset if I upset you with a sonnet that wasn't a good sonnet
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The thread of life is strong with this one, you've spun it well.
(Protagonista: "Is that a distaff in your pocket? Or are you just glad to see me?")
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The distaff fits in no man's pocket
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I love it. You deny the existence of sirens and muses, yet the Fates escape that fate. I like the turn, and I'm left wondering who 'you' is. The last three lines feel almost supernatural.
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(07-24-2016, 06:18 PM)just mercedes Wrote: I love it. You deny the existence of sirens and muses, yet the Fates escape that fate. I like the turn,
and I'm left wondering who 'you' is. The last three lines feel almost supernatural.
I don't think she denied any existences. The protagonist just didn't happen to be
near any sirenous islands, and muses are well known for letting their inspiree do the
singing (and suffer the consequences). And the "you"? I hope that's us.
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(07-24-2016, 08:53 PM)next Wrote: (07-24-2016, 06:18 PM)just mercedes Wrote: I love it. You deny the existence of sirens and muses, yet the Fates escape that fate. I like the turn,
and I'm left wondering who 'you' is. The last three lines feel almost supernatural.
I don't think she denied any existences. What part of 'there are no sirens, muses never sing' did I get wrong? The protagonist just didn't happen to be
near any sirenous islands, and muses are well known for letting their inspiree do the
singing (and suffer the consequences). And the "you"? I hope that's us.
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(07-25-2016, 05:06 AM)just mercedes Wrote: (07-24-2016, 08:53 PM)next Wrote: (07-24-2016, 06:18 PM)just mercedes Wrote: I love it. You deny the existence of sirens and muses, yet the Fates escape that fate. I like the turn,
and I'm left wondering who 'you' is. The last three lines feel almost supernatural.
I don't think she denied any existences. What part of 'there are no sirens, muses never sing' did I get wrong? The protagonist just didn't happen to be
near any sirenous islands, and muses are well known for letting their inspiree do the
singing (and suffer the consequences). And the "you"? I hope that's us.
Plausible interpretation:
1. Sirens exist, there just ain't none in the vicinity.
2. Muses exist, they just don't sing.
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...just going to tiptoe through quietly and leave you guys to it...
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