Thoughts on Free Thought

[Coquette16]

I appreciate the overall theme and the ease of rhyme and rhythm. The repetition of the first line in each stanza enhances those elements well. As for the last line of each stanza: I like that it also hugs the stanza, but it seems that it should be more quickly from the first person point of view, unless you are slowly unraveling a sense of evolution...humanity/"one" to "I" as a "one".

I have a few comments below, but overall, I really like it...Nice work

I'm free to think and do as I please.
Unbound and freed by Socrates-
To live and dream and spread the word
Of lessons often left unheard.
For from within, one finds their peace.

I'm free to think and do as I please.
No walls or chains or locks or keys
Can suffocate or dominate
My innate need to cogitate.          *seems a bit forced with rhyme here
For from within, one finds their peace.

I'm free to think and do as I please.
Opposing vile tyrannies-
A call to all, though few will heed.    *great two lines--strong and pointed
By my own will I intercede.
For from within, one finds their peace.   *former lines are so personal...maybe here the change of point of view?

I won’t be bound by foreign will.
No rule so bold and brash and shrill
Shall box my precious sanctity
Of individuality.
By my own will I have found peace.

-Coquette16