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Sign of the Cross, Son of a bitch,
bury the body in a ditch,
and when he rises, let him in,
feed him Mutton, drown him in gin.
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I never have understood the need for blasphemy in poetry, but whatever floats your boat............
As for the poem, ditch must be a forced rhyme surely? ( body was held in a cave)
Also perhaps you should change "Mutton" to "Pork" as Jesus was a Jew? And I don't see why mutton has a capital M.
Although I am agnostic I fail to see humour in upsetting people who do have faith in a religion.
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Lol, I'm a Christian. I knew very well this could be interpreted as blasphemy, but I also knew how this could [perhaps almost] just as well be interpreted as something else, something noble, and in my mind this is generally a neutral poem (kind of like Ecclesiastes, only less beautiful and didactic). Ditch, I admit, is a bit of a forced rhyme, but I'm not gunning for Him alone here -- and Mutton [the capital is very intentional] is something you should have caught,

. I'll mull over this one, though.
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(03-27-2016, 02:57 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: Lol, I'm a Christian. I knew very well this could be interpreted as blasphemy, but I also knew how this could [perhaps almost] just as well be interpreted as something else, something noble, and in my mind this is generally a neutral poem (kind of like Ecclesiastes, only less beautiful and didactic). Ditch, I admit, is a bit of a forced rhyme, but I'm not gunning for Him alone here -- and Mutton [the capital is very intentional] is something you should have caught,
. I'll mull over this one, though.
I didn't read it as blasphemous. Maybe to a Catholic, but even then it's semantics and there's no real tone of rebellion here. So, yes, I could read it as neutral. "Ditch" is a distraction. Even if it serves a purpose. As far as the caps on "Mutton", I guess you made an exception to your own rule.
Paul