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[heslopian]

Hello, my name is Jack, and I'm an alcoholic! (Sorry, couldn't resist.)

[billy]

hi jack. have a drink and write some poetry

[Lawrence]

The new page is sexy!

[billy]

more can be found at the bottom of the home page

[billy]

hi eclipse and welcome to the forum.
thanks for posting your first poem, i love it when we get new writers
in the poetry forum. if you have any friends feel free to invite them over
hope you stick around and post some more stuff

billy

[srijantje]

welcome,eclipse

[srijantje]

Hi,Verbavore,welcome to the forum,nice to see you post

[billy]

hi verbivore.
always good to see a new member post.
put some poetry out thee if you have any,

[srijantje]

Hi,Silver,welcome to the forum

[billy]

hi etherealdontgo
just read your first poem..nicely done.
welcome to the forum. looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Verbavore]

Rhythmic Gathering
circa 1996

From the soul and heart,
into the depth of mind,
reform beliefs around you cart.
Old, dead ideas just leave behind.
Convey in truth with strong conviction.
Convert them to the light.
Hold strong unto your firm intention.
Defeat them with your might
of mind and logic. Blow their cone
into tomorrow's yesterday,
with your skills that you hold prone,
'cause if you don't, you might just pay.
In ways that only God commands,
with powers so surreal:
Exile you to far off lands,
Omnipotence, you'll feel.
Just say what your heart deems true,
and never sway at all.
Complete the things you want to do,
and don't dare take the fall
into the death of ignorance;
a mind that's not quite squared,
no new thoughts and no new stance;
in life, too bad you fared.

Thus, all out there who wish to sing
great words to state ideas,
with much sincerity you'll bring
and change all men to be as
incredible as the setting sun;
a sight that's not to be missed;
not loathing in love that's already done,
for beauty and life you kissed.
A change that's always good and sound,
with a tone, it's loud and clear
that breaks the chains, our mind, it's bound
by uncertain thoughts and fear.

When passed on to posterity,
to keep the lighthouse bright,
on track, no, not 'and where is she?'
for kept up is the fight
against the me that's just not known
when you inscribe your soul
you pass on the seed that's freshly sown
that makes your treetrunk whole
and makes the glad from up above
upon all faces show
just how much happiness and love
in ears that you can blow.

We are lovers: You are the chant
sung by primeval man,
never saying 'no one can't'
behind our eyes, we know we can
and always do in REM,
the truth we see and fly.
Our life-force kills the BEM.
Inside, we know we'll never die.

This is the reason, and the rhyme
we try to pass our Universe
in words that eat a lot of time
by writing meter and the verse:
To break the no fruit cycle-track
to pick our eggs in spring:
To bring the Renaissance Man back;
A simple rhythmic gathering.

[billy]

the flow of the poem is as good as the end rymes.
i particularly like the end verse.

[Verbavore]

Thanks, billy. (I love your profile pic btw). I know it's really old stuff and it's really simple: couplets without complex internal rhyme, no acrostics or other hidden messages, and no rhythm changes. Though it's pretty hard to maintain meter, a strict meter often makes recitation sound contrived. With that said, I thought it was appropriate for the topic, even though I didn't start a new thread to post a new poem... You just popped my 'first to comment cherry' 8^ )

[Verbavore]

Thanks, billy. (I love your profile pic btw). I know it's really old stuff and it's really simple: couplets without complex internal rhyme, no acrostics or other hidden messages, and no rhythm changes. Though it's pretty hard to maintain meter, a strict meter often makes recitation sound contrived. With that said, I thought it was appropriate for the topic, even though I didn't start a new thread to post a new poem... You just popped my 'first to comment cherry' 8^ )

[billy]

hehe,

the best place to post poetry in the poetry forum proper.
but i think anyone who posts their first poem on the site should get a response

[srijantje]

hi,femme mature,welcome to the forum

[srijantje]

Happy birthday to Bianca:ms:

[srijantje]

Hi,Jetz,welcome to the forum

[dudestir127]

Hi. I'm new here, and I'm brand new to poetry. I enjoy reading poems that others wrote, but I can't quite figure out a style or anything that quite works for me. I was never interested in it in school, but now that I'm almost done with college I'm actually enjoying reading poems even though I'm not that good at writing my own.....yet.

[billy]

hi dude, welcome to the site.

don't worry about being good or bad, that's not really what poetry is about and just reading is fine.
you can always leave feed back even you you feel you don't want to leave a poem
of course we'd love you leave a few poems though

you can always pst in the mild crit where we'll just try and give a pointer or two.
you can always post in the just for fun section. and you can always post in the short form poetry section, if you don't want ii depth feedback there just say so in the body of your post.

it does sound like you want to write so i'd suggest the mild critique forum untill you get a bit more confident.

looking forward to see some of your work or feedback either way