Nuance

[Todd]

Often imperceptible,

a glacial shift pushing toward
the inevitable

Tight smile—twist
of a wedding ring,
a hesitation

easy to miss.

Halting words;
inconsolable.

[billy]

for me i think it could do with a strong image in the last 2 lines.

as it is (again for me) the poem can be taken 2 ways.

a) a breakdown of a relationship
b) the beginning of a new one.

the ring twisting definitely denotes a time to move on which i think is the essence of the poem; moving on.

easy to miss ties the poem to the title.

thanks for the read todd.

[heslopian]

Very moving verse, and short, which I enjoy; I like succinct poetry, and economy of language. You've clearly put thought into your line breaks, and the seperation of stanzas, and I don't think there's anything that I'd change. My favourite was the line beginning "glacial shift..." Some day soon I'll be able to properly critique your work

[Todd]

Thank you guys. I've been slammed recently and haven't gotten back to the comments. I appreciate you both taking the time with this poem.

Much appreciated,

Todd