< a visit to the park >
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Read by J. Talessa:
[video=youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_BAh36ZK1gQ [/video]
Painting: "Self-Portrait in a Yellow Coat" by Aurél Bernáth


                       < a visit to the park >

  From the Payne Whitney Psychiatric Clinic
  beside the East River on the Upper East Side of Manhattan,
  it's seven and a half blocks east to Central Park.
   
  Which, today, is where I'm headed.
 
  I put on my yellow coat, walk south a block, and turn onto 67th Street
  so i can stop by the 67th Street Branch of the New York Public Library.
  I'll turn in my books, go to the park, then get some more on the way back.
 
  Where 67th hits 5th Ave there's a memorial to the 107th New York Infantry
  Regiment.
  During the Great War (World War I) they fought in France.
  Of the 3,700 men originally in the regiment, 580 were killed and 1,487
  were wounded.
  Four of them were awarded the Medal of Honor.
  From there I turn up 5th Ave and head into the park.
  It's seven short blocks north.
   
  Just a block below the Alice in Wonderland sculpture
  and beside the Conservatory pond where they sail model boats;
  there's this statue of Hans Christian Andersen reading to a duck.
 
  This is my place:
 
           sitting beside Hans Christian Andersen
           I look out on the pond
           out on the water and all the model boats
           that seem a mile off sometimes
           when it's early and there's a mist over the water
   
           I look out on the pond
           as the sun glints off the water
           as the boats glide through the water
 
  Christian Andersen and his duck.
  I wonder how many of the men of the 107th,
  in their trenches over there in France;
  how many of them, while they waited, remembered his stories,
  remembered their mothers as they read to them:
 
     "The Little Mermaid"
     "The Emperor's New Clothes"
     "The Princess and the Pea"
     "The Ugly Duckling"
 
  Standing in a trench during the Great War
  Standing there
  Remembering your mother reading you "The Emperor's New Clothes"
 
  No, that's just me being sentimental and ironic and symbolic.
 
  They were probably thinking about French whores.
 
  No, that's just me thinking about French whores.
 
  Though, since they're all dead, who's to say different?
 
           such a beautiful day
           such a beautiful park
           as the sun glints off the water
           as the boats glide through the water...
 
  But I'm thinking about the men of the 107th,
  their dead bodies strewn across the fields of France.
  (And French whores.)
 
  But, just in time, Hans and his duck save me:
  They snatch me from the dead of the 107th,
  they return me to my rightful place:
 
  On a bench near Hans and his duck.
   
  I'm watching this woman in a red coat feed popcorn to the pigeons.
  I have my bench, Hans has his duck, she has her pigeons.
 
  She's this Monet painting:
   
          "A woman in a red coat feeding popcorn to pigeons in Central Park."
 
  New York City
  Central Park
  pigeons
 
  here
  at least
  the world makes sense
 
  then the woman in the red coat gets up,
  walks over,
  hands me the half full bag of popcorn,
  and walks off.
 
  So here I am in my own Monet:
 
          "A man in a yellow coat feeding popcorn to pigeons in Central Park."
 
  After a while I get up,
  walk over to this woman in a green coat writing in her journal
  (she's been watching me).
 
  I hand her the popcorn,
  she tears a page out of her journal,
  folds it,
  and hands it to me.
 
  As I walk south I look back at the painting:
 
          "A woman in a green coat feeding popcorn to pigeons in Central Park."
   
  I continue to walk south,
  I think of the men of the 107th New York Infantry Regiment,
  I think of the books I'm planning to get at the 67th Street Branch of the
  New York Public Library,
  I think of the Payne Whitney Psychiatric Clinic sitting beside the East
  River,
  And I think of popcorn and pigeons and kids and tiny sailing boats and Hans
  and his duck... and French whores.
 
  As I continue to walk south
  I unfold the page the woman in the green coat gave me and I read it.
  It's this poem
  word for word
  (except for the French whores)
 
  I fold the page
  I trip over a curb
  and then I see him:
 
  A man in a blue coat.
 
  I hand him this poem
  (still lacking French whores)
  and as I continue to walk south I look back at him,
  it won't be long now:
 
          "A man in a blue coat feeding popcorn to pigeons in Central Park."
 
  red, yellow, green, blue
 
  here
  at least
  the world makes sense
 
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#2
i have only said it a few times about a piece of writing; i loved it. narrated prose poetry or whatever it would be called, i think it's simply too good to alter. i suppose i could pick at it but for me that's all it would be, me picking at it for the sake of it.
i love the yellow jacketed man mentioned. it works really well with the picture.
the narration as a whole was a fantastical train of thought imagery. the repetition of the pond and the duck and anderson worked perfectly. the reader (me) gets the feeling that the payne whitney is more than just a reference point to give me a sense of the area or park. the french whores who came from who knows where strut through parts of the poem with ease. it all flows into itself and the into the reader.
i remember seeing the pigeon woman in that christmas film with kulkin and somehow she's also in this poem. sorry for the back pats, but it's one of the best poems i've read in a long time. thanks for the read.
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#3
Ditto..I am green with envy.

I don't know why I'm bothering with my reined in, superficial, bits of nothing. I'm just wasting my time.

Damn you!
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#4
me neither, ooh that's right, poetry like this helps us strive to be that bit better. Wink
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I'm back again. Not to say much - I am still of the same opinion as billy, this is one of the best poems I've read on here (and I've read some amazing stuff).

Ar you willing to tell us more about how it came into being?
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(12-18-2011, 08:01 AM)grannyjill Wrote:  I'm back again.  Not to say much - I am still of the same opinion as billy, this is one of the best poems I've read on here (and I've read some amazing stuff).

Ar you willing to tell us more about how it came into being?

Yes, of course, I am more than willing to prattle on endlessly about its
creation myth and word-birthing in general.

P.S. Lest I've obscured it, let me iterate:
Your liking this poem makes me pathetically happy.

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(12-18-2011, 03:51 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
(12-18-2011, 08:01 AM)grannyjill Wrote:  I'm back again. Not to say much - I am still of the same opinion as billy, this is one of the best poems I've read on here (and I've read some amazing stuff).

Ar you willing to tell us more about how it came into being?

Yes, of course, I am more than willing to prattle on endlessly about its
creation myth and word-birthing in general.

P.S. Lest I've obscured it, let me iterate:
Your liking this poem makes me pathetically happy.


Don't tease. I am truly interested. I don't get visited by my muse with anything half as creative and interesting as this....did it come to you in an instant? Did you start with the picture and then let your creative flow go where it wanted? Did it need to be carefully worked out? Did it need lots of editing. Tell me!
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Am busy trying to finish wrapping xmas presents to mail tomorrow, but
honest, my ego craves this sort of thing, will be back. Smile
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Thanks for the link, I hadn't read this one. I enjoyed the first read and have a feeling it will stick with me. I'll be back too.
billy wrote:welcome to the site. make it your own, wear it like a well loved slipper and wear it out. ella pleads:please click forum titles for posting guidelines, important threads. New poet? Try Poetic DevicesandWard's Tips

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(09-22-2015, 04:47 AM)ellajam Wrote:  Thanks for the link, I hadn't read this one. I enjoyed the first read and have a feeling it will stick with me. I'll be back too.

I'm hoping you will.

But, considering I promised grannyjill on 12-18-2011 at 08:31 PM that I'd be back and it's getting
close to my forth year of not honouring my promise to her:  

I not only don't deserve your back-coming, I deserve extra coal in my stocking as well.

And wherever you have found yourself grannyjill, I sincerely apologize.
Ray
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(09-22-2015, 10:07 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
(09-22-2015, 04:47 AM)ellajam Wrote:  Thanks for the link, I hadn't read this one. I enjoyed the first read and have a feeling it will stick with me. I'll be back too.

I'm hoping you will.

But, considering I promised grannyjill on 12-18-2011 at 08:31 PM that I'd be back and it's getting
close to my forth year of not honouring my promise to her:  

I not only don't deserve your back-coming, I deserve extra coal in my stocking as well.

And wherever you have found yourself grannyjill, I sincerely apologize.
Ray

I hadn't read the comments aside from seeing your I'll be back. You could make it up to her, or at least to the universe, by finally answering her questions.
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#12
Stop trying to create a karmic paradox, guys
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(09-22-2015, 11:49 AM)ellajam Wrote:  
(09-22-2015, 10:07 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
I'm hoping you will be back.
But, considering I promised grannyjill on 12-18-2011 at 08:31 PM that I'd be back and it's getting
close to my forth year of not honouring my promise to her:  

I not only don't deserve your back-coming, I deserve extra coal in my stocking as well.
And wherever you have found yourself grannyjill, I sincerely apologize.

I hadn't read the comments aside from seeing your I'll be back. You could make it up to her, or at least to the universe, by finally answering her questions.

    Am busy trying to finish getting ready for a trip out to see my sisters in California,
    but honest, my ego craves this sort of thing, will be back. Smile





(09-22-2015, 11:53 AM)milo Wrote:  Stop trying to create a karmic paradox, guys

    Aw, but it's so much fun... tragically so.
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I'm glad that this is in Miscellaneous Poetry because I have a lot of praise and nothing to workshop!

This is such a wonderful poem, and I loved listening to the audio version while reading along. (The reader has such a pretty voice too.)

Thanks for sharing this!

Emma
These fragments I have shored against my ruins
Why then Ile fit you
-T.S. Eliot (The Wasteland)

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(01-02-2016, 11:33 AM)Emz Wrote:  I'm glad that this is in Miscellaneous Poetry because I have a lot of praise and nothing to workshop!

This is such a wonderful poem, and I loved listening to the audio version while reading along. (The reader has such a pretty voice too.)

Thanks for sharing this!

Emma

Yeah, just had to add this to your New York Odyssey thread.
J. Talessa was gracious enough to record the damn thing. (I'm lousy at reading poems.)

J. Talessa is a wonderful poet in her own right:

Hourglass Tap     - J. Talessa

I can't fall asleep
to the sound of a dripping faucet
leaking the life's blood of Earth
into my bathroom sink-
drip by drip
I hear droplet lives
slipping down the drain
with every hour
every minute
every drip
of the faucet.

- - -

I posted another of hers over in:
http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-7500-...#pid202192
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