A randy young chap name of Powell,
Once mounted a frisky young fowl.
As he poked in his pickle,
Her feathers did tickle;
He laughed 'til he splitted his bowel.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
A randy young chap name of Powell, (very descriptive; however Powell is such a respectable surname for someone young and randy)
Once mounted a frisky young fowl. ("frisky" implies that the fowl was consenting or willing, so at least Powell had that going for him)
As he thrust in his pickle, (no size descriptor? :p )
Her feathers did tickle; (okay so now we know the fowl is female)
He laughed 'til he splitted his bowel. (is splitted even a word?)
Forget everything I said, I love this and the pun title
Emma
These fragments I have shored against my ruins
Why then Ile fit you -T.S. Eliot (The Wasteland)
A randy young chap name of Powell, (very descriptive; however Powell is such a respectable surname for someone young and randy)
Once mounted a frisky young fowl. ("frisky" implies that the fowl was consenting or willing, so at least Powell had that going for him)
As he poked in his pickle, (no size descriptor? :p )
Her feathers did tickle; (okay so now we know the fowl is female)
He laughed 'til he splitted his bowel. (is splitted even a word?)
Emma
What curious points you bring up. As these seem to reflect effort on your part,
I shall take it upon myself to reflect well and hard on your suggestions and try my
best not to misconstrue them any further. It's good to find someone with the courage
to express themselves, even at the risk of being thought inept and ill-prepared.
Your attempts are sincerely appreciated. I'm leaving on a trip to the Aucklands
tomorrow, but I certainly intend to mull them upon my return.
Ray
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
A randy young chap name of Powell, (very descriptive; however Powell is such a respectable surname for someone young and randy)
Once mounted a frisky young fowl. ("frisky" implies that the fowl was consenting or willing, so at least Powell had that going for him)
As he thrust in his pickle, (no size descriptor? :p )
Her feathers did tickle; (okay so now we know the fowl is female)
He laughed 'til he splitted his bowel. (is splitted even a word?)
Emma
What curious points you bring up. As these seem to reflect effort on your part,
I shall take it upon myself to reflect well and hard on your suggestions and try my
best not to misconstrue them any further. It's good to find someone with the courage
to express themselves, even at the risk of being thought inept and ill-prepared.
Your attempts are sincerely appreciated. I'm leaving on a trip to the Aucklands
tomorrow, but I certainly intend to mull them upon my return.
Ray
I didn't mean anything by it--I was just responding to the fact that NobodyNothing was joking about doing a line-by-line. Usually when I find a new community I try my best to adapt quickly and fit in. (I'm very nostalgic for the old poetry forum I used to hang out at, which is no longer there )
I wouldn't have tried this sort of thing if a) you weren't a regular and b) I didn't assume you were good with humor. After scanning around a few of the posts I figured most of the regulars here would be alright with that sort of thing. Please don't misconstrue anything I say as negative. I got concerned when I saw your recent limerick (but then again I have a habit of thinking everything is about me which I know isn't always the case).
I meant it when I said that I loved this limerick, and the line-by-line was nothing more than a joke.
Emma
These fragments I have shored against my ruins
Why then Ile fit you -T.S. Eliot (The Wasteland)
What curious points you bring up. As these seem to reflect effort on your part,
I shall take it upon myself to reflect well and hard on your suggestions and try my
best not to misconstrue them any further. It's good to find someone with the courage
to express themselves, even at the risk of being thought inept and ill-prepared.
Your attempts are sincerely appreciated. I'm leaving on a trip to the Aucklands
tomorrow, but I certainly intend to mull them upon my return.
Ray
I didn't mean anything by it--I was just responding to the fact that NobodyNothing was joking about doing a line-by-line. Usually when I find a new community I try my best to adapt quickly and fit in. (I'm very nostalgic for the old poetry forum I used to hang out at, which is no longer there )
I wouldn't have tried this sort of thing if a) you weren't a regular and b) I didn't assume you were good with humor. After scanning around a few of the posts I figured most of the regulars here would be alright with that sort of thing. Please don't misconstrue anything I say as negative. I got concerned when I saw your recent limerick (but then again I have a habit of thinking everything is about me which I know isn't always the case).
I meant it when I said that I loved this limerick, and the line-by-line was nothing more than a joke.
Emma
Since this is in fun, topic be damned.
Auckland my ass, or
Really? Have a wonderful trip.
Emma, you are right on target. My sincere sympathies on the loss of your forum. I lost one once, still mourn, and if this one, which is so precious to me, went poof it would take a piece of me with it. But on to the fun, I hope you find a cozy place here. Don't let the so dry it crackles humor throw you off, unless you're in the Workshops anything goes. Pour your beverage of choice and let the worries go, all is bound to be fine.
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What curious points you bring up. As these seem to reflect effort on your part,
I shall take it upon myself to reflect well and hard on your suggestions and try my
best not to misconstrue them any further. It's good to find someone with the courage
to express themselves, even at the risk of being thought inept and ill-prepared.
Your attempts are sincerely appreciated. I'm leaving on a trip to the Aucklands
tomorrow, but I certainly intend to mull them upon my return.
Ray
I didn't mean anything by it--I was just responding to the fact that NobodyNothing was joking about doing a line-by-line. Usually when I find a new community I try my best to adapt quickly and fit in. (I'm very nostalgic for the old poetry forum I used to hang out at, which is no longer there )
I wouldn't have tried this sort of thing if a) you weren't a regular and b) I didn't assume you were good with humor. After scanning around a few of the posts I figured most of the regulars here would be alright with that sort of thing. Please don't misconstrue anything I say as negative. I got concerned when I saw your recent limerick (but then again I have a habit of thinking everything is about me which I know isn't always the case).
I meant it when I said that I loved this limerick, and the line-by-line was nothing more than a joke.
Emma
You silly goose! I was just being a smart-ass. I was expanding on your joke of commenting
on the limerick seriously, with my joke of giving a very serious, condescending reply.
OH, wait! Maybe that's what you just did and I fell for it?
Irony is a triple-edged sword!
I took my lead from the sarcasm of your last line in your reply to Leanne:
(12-29-2015, 08:29 AM)Emz Wrote: ...
Hey there Leanne,
I'm glad this forum offers thoughtful critique and it wouldn't be fair to offer anything less.
P.S. Wow, I like this poem. It really flows.
You should always think seriously about thinking I'm thinking seriously.
Ray
P.S.
(12-29-2015, 10:56 PM)Emz Wrote: ... I'm very nostalgic for the old poetry forum I used to hang out at, which is no longer there.
What was its name? Just curious, I might know someone from there.
(12-29-2015, 10:56 PM)Emz Wrote: After scanning around a few of the posts I figured most of the regulars here would be alright with that sort of thing.
Yes, they are. And if you find one that isn't, tell me. Those are the ones I LOVE to have fun with. :evil grin:
(12-29-2015, 10:56 PM)Emz Wrote: I got concerned when I saw your recent limerick (but then again I have a habit of thinking everything is about me which I know isn't always the case).
Your thinking that the recent limerick might have something to do with you is VERY DISTURBING.
My mind refuses to go there this early in the morning.
But it does imply three positive things about your poetic personality:
1. You're an egotist; everything IS about you. -- Absolutely essential for writing in general and poetry in specific.
2. You have a VERY creative imagination.
3. You can read people's subconscious. -- Oh, damn, there I went and went there...
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
(12-29-2015, 10:27 PM)rayheinrich Wrote: What curious points you bring up. As these seem to reflect effort on your part,
I shall take it upon myself to reflect well and hard on your suggestions and try my
best not to misconstrue them any further. It's good to find someone with the courage
to express themselves, even at the risk of being thought inept and ill-prepared.
Your attempts are sincerely appreciated. I'm leaving on a trip to the Aucklands
tomorrow, but I certainly intend to mull them upon my return.
Ray
I didn't mean anything by it--I was just responding to the fact that NobodyNothing was joking about doing a line-by-line. Usually when I find a new community I try my best to adapt quickly and fit in. (I'm very nostalgic for the old poetry forum I used to hang out at, which is no longer there )
I wouldn't have tried this sort of thing if a) you weren't a regular and b) I didn't assume you were good with humor. After scanning around a few of the posts I figured most of the regulars here would be alright with that sort of thing. Please don't misconstrue anything I say as negative. I got concerned when I saw your recent limerick (but then again I have a habit of thinking everything is about me which I know isn't always the case).
I meant it when I said that I loved this limerick, and the line-by-line was nothing more than a joke.
Emma
You silly goose! I was just being a smart-ass. I was expanding on your joke of commenting
on the limerick seriously, with my joke of giving a very serious, condescending reply.
OH, wait! Maybe that's what you just did and I fell for it?
Irony is a triple-edged sword!
I took my lead from the sarcasm of your last line in your reply to Leanne:
(12-29-2015, 08:29 AM)Emz Wrote: ...
Hey there Leanne,
I'm glad this forum offers thoughtful critique and it wouldn't be fair to offer anything less.
P.S. Wow, I like this poem. It really flows.
You should always think seriously about thinking I'm thinking seriously.
Ray
P.S.
(12-29-2015, 10:56 PM)Emz Wrote: ... I'm very nostalgic for the old poetry forum I used to hang out at, which is no longer there.
What was its name? Just curious, I might know someone from there.
(12-29-2015, 10:56 PM)Emz Wrote: After scanning around a few of the posts I figured most of the regulars here would be alright with that sort of thing.
Yes, they are. And if you find one that isn't, tell me. Those are the ones I LOVE to have fun with. :evil grin:
(12-29-2015, 10:56 PM)Emz Wrote: I got concerned when I saw your recent limerick (but then again I have a habit of thinking everything is about me which I know isn't always the case).
Your thinking that the recent limerick might have something to do with you is VERY DISTURBING.
My mind refuses to go there this early in the morning.
But it does imply three positive things about your poetic personality:
1. You're an egotist; everything IS about you. -- Absolutely essential for writing in general and poetry in specific.
2. You have a VERY creative imagination.
3. You can read people's subconscious. -- Oh, damn, there I went and went there...
Hi there Ray,
I wish I could sayI GOTCHA!,but I didn't.
At first I figured you were just being a smart ass , but then I saw your new limerick and, well, yeah my mind ran away with me. It still makes perfect sense in my mind how I came to the conclusion, however I have noticed more recently my strong ability to emotionally reason. Perhaps I am a bit of an egotist ! (but it's wrapped in insecurities). Yes, a little too creative (which isn't always productive)...and yes, you were right when you said I can read people's subconscious. That's one of the interesting things about you; you know subconsciously that everything is about me (laughing).
It was a relief to see your reply last night actually. I won't let on to my paranoid mind in the future
I used to go to poem.org/forum. I've already recognised a couple of names actually
ALL HAIL THE HYPNOTOAD
Emma all hail the hypnotoad
These fragments I have shored against my ruins
Why then Ile fit you -T.S. Eliot (The Wasteland)
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