Edie Louise Levinson, 1938-2009
#1
I made for us two eggs
for breakfast.
Once cool,
the other shall go
in the dog bowl.

Some days I still forget, dushechka.

PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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#2
all i can say is wow!
i love the subterfuge you used in this piece addy.
i loved the warmth of the it.
i loved the bad syntax an english speaking foreigner would use

but (there's always a but) i love dushenka most of all my darling.

that one word ties the poem into a whole.
it shows edie's love for her dog, how she remembers it (the dog is dead and she sometimes does the act unknowingly)
i think it's a perfect poem
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#3
Thanks for the kind words billy Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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