Three Haikus

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Please tell me which one you like best, and why.

He's not near the end,
Nor' hath he begun his tests,
Tiny wails fill my heart.

Stinging metal bars,
heavy thick breath levitates,
gliding across glass.

Crysten drops of sun,
cooly kissing the clear glass,
they drink together.

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He's not near the end,
Nor' hath he begun his tests,
Tiny wails fill my heart.

it's more of a senryu than a haiku
about exams, i like it, the last line is really strong

Stinging metal bars,
heavy thick breath levitates,
gliding across glass.

this one has the feel of a haiku about it. obviously winter. it's simple and effective.

Crysten drops of sun,
cooly kissing the clear glass,
they drink together.

what is the first word? agian this one
is more like a senryu.

for me the 2nd one is the best, it has the quality of haiku.

Please tell me which one you like best, and why.

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