Mystique

[Forestdawn]

Soothing pleasures.

[Erthona]

Sorry, I know this is in fun, but the line "so dark and so mystique." bothers me. Not only was mystique used as the title, but you are using "mystique" a noun, when you probably need an adjective, like mysterious. I think maybe "piqued" instead of "peak".

Sorry,

Dale

[billy]

i love choccy though by the bar and not the cup

[Forestdawn]

Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. it is greatly appreciated.

Chocolate is my favorite sweet too. Thanks Billy.

Dale: What awesome critique. I humbly thank you. Let me share with you as to why I chose the words I did.

I used the word "mystique" because of it's mysterious and fascinating quality. not like the word mysterious, which is something unexplained or secret But, either word works well.

I used the word peaked, because, in the poem I wanted to reach the top, the summit, the highest, or utmost point of anything. as to piqued, to arouse, to stir up or excite.

I believe that the poem would sound and read well with mystique or mysterious, and peaked or piqued.

Great comments!Well done. Keep 'em coming.
Thank You

[Tiger the Lion]

Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. it is greatly appreciated.

Chocolate is my favorite sweet too. Thanks Billy.

Dale: What awesome critique. I humbly thank you. Let me share with you as to why I chose the words I did.

I  used the word "mystique" because of it's mysterious and fascinating quality. not like the word mysterious, which is something unexplained or secret But, either word works well.

I used the word peaked, because, in the poem I wanted to reach the top, the summit,  the highest, or utmost point of anything. as to piqued, to arouse, to stir up or excite.

I believe that the poem would sound and read well with mystique or mysterious, and peaked or piqued.

Great comments!Well done. Keep 'em coming.
Thank You

Hello Forest. I think you can get away with "peak" as written but I'm not entirely convinced "pique" was not your intent. It just fits better. I'm not so sure with "mystique". It's not a matter of whether it's a good word or not. It's simply a noun that doesn't bend into an adjective. You could say "so dark, with such mystique" or something like, but as is the word is a tripwire. It reads as a mistake.
Paul