Haiku

[heslopian]

through the window
dusk approaches
I smile then go

[billy]

through the window
dusk approaches
I smile then go

i like this one, for me its agood image with a feel of being lecherous
dusk could act as the seasonal word (winter; in hindsight autumn) and i love the last line.

i've re read it a few times since you deleted it and my comment and i like it even more than i did. nice one jack

[heslopian]

@billy - Thanks billy In what way lecherous? I see this haiku as being about death (by "go" I meant die). It was kind of inspired by this H. F. Noyes piece I read:

Midsummer dusk:
after the coo of doves
a softer silence

[billy]

for me it has the feel of a bedroom.

it's like having to leave before the man of the house gets home from work
it's a situation, i've been in a few times

the one you showed with the doves. for me doves represent love
when they leave a softer silence of death could certainly have taken their place.

[heslopian]

I did actually imagine the speaker of this haiku as being in bed when dawn approached, but not with another man's wife