Familiarity

[vtsai01]

I've read in other critiques to not use similes or metaphors, especially cliche ones... So hopefully I did it well enough to not make it come so mundane? What do you think? Also, is it too vague because of all the similes and metaphors or does it fit just right? 

It just fizzled like a carbonated drink,
That sat out for too long, stirred or not. 
As the changes come with states of matter,
Metamorphosis took a solid into liquid. 
It is a glass of milk in a low operated fridge. 
It spoiled but not yet curdled - Thank God! 
My perspective is now setting in the familiarity,
As I walk and think about this friendly feeling. 
I'm flying solo, exploring my world. 
It can be quite interesting. 
But just like any ride, you sleep. 
Oh wells, no need to cry over spilled milk. 
Because this is my world,
And I'll choose what to drink,
And most importantly, where to put it. 

[Wjames]

I've read in other critiques to not use similes or metaphors, especially cliche ones... So hopefully I did it well enough to not make it come so mundane? What do you think? Also, is it too vague because of all the similes and metaphors or does it fit just right? 

That's silly advice. Of course try and stay away from over-used/cliche simile's/metaphors, but definitely don't avoid them all together. The poetic devices should be clear and make sense however.

It just fizzled like a carbonated drink,
That sat out for too long, stirred or not. What just fizzled like a carbonated drink (what is "it")? This is what I mean by clear ^. I don't think you need the first comma at the end of line 1.
As the changes come with states of matter,
Metamorphosis took a solid into liquid.
It is a glass of milk in a low operated fridge. This should have been known before/when you made the comparison to a carbonated drink.
It spoiled but not yet curdled - Thank God! 
My perspective is now setting in the familiarity,
As I walk and think about this friendly feeling. What friendly feeling? Why are you feeling it, and how does it actually feel (i.e use the five senses: warm, etc)?
I'm flying solo, exploring my world. 
It can be quite interesting. This isn't a sentence, you should consider combining it with the previous one.
But just like any ride, you sleep. 
Oh wells, no need to cry over spilled milk. cliche
Because this is my world,
And I'll choose what to drink,
And most importantly, where to put it. 

Just some of my thoughts as I read your poem, hopefully it's not too harsh for novice. I don't really get the object of the poem - are you rebelling against refrigerating milk out of familiarity?

[billy]

if that were said it's outright wrong or they've meant 'to use similes /metaphors but not cliched ones.

similes /metaphors are two of the most important poetic devices a poet can use. clich on the other hand makes poetry mundane unless it's used with purpose.

to the poem :

another thing that creates mundane poems is wordiness. [not always but often] and there is some words that could be cut form the poem which would better define the subject of the poem. the latter half of the poem doesn't add enough to be there. try and make each word/line count.

I've read in other critiques to not use similes or metaphors, especially cliche ones... So hopefully I did it well enough to not make it come so mundane? What do you think? Also, is it too vague because of all the similes and metaphors or does it fit just right? 

It just fizzled like a carbonated drink, a good opening line though if i think of fizzled i think of fizzled out. a suggestion would be fizzed,
That sat out for too long, stirred or not. stirred or not feels excess and unnecessary as does the next line.
As the changes come with states of matter,
Metamorphosis took a solid into liquid. this creates a good image of sour milk though wonder if liquid into solid would be better at stating the fact
It is a glass of milk in a low operated fridge. 
It spoiled but not yet curdled - Thank God! 
My perspective is now setting in the familiarity,
As I walk and think about this friendly feeling. 
I'm flying solo, exploring my world. 
It can be quite interesting. 
But just like any ride, you sleep. 
Oh wells, no need to cry over spilled milk.  really cliche
Because this is my world,
And I'll choose what to drink,
And most importantly, where to put it. 

[clairethaoduong]

I think that "crying over spilled milk" is somehow redundant and it seems to be a cliche for me. And the "Oh wells" is ofcourse a grammar mistake; to me, it doesn't fit in the poem at all as it strikes me as an indifferent attitude, not to mention a bit informal. Additionally, "Because" before "this is my world" makes the statement a bit weak. I think it's a better idea to leave out "because" and add an exclaimation mark after it for a sense of determination. But overall, great poem and keep writing more

[alsayn]

I've read in other critiques to not use similes or metaphors, especially cliche ones... So hopefully I did it well enough to not make it come so mundane? What do you think? Also, is it too vague because of all the similes and metaphors or does it fit just right? 

It just fizzled like a carbonated drink, I would recommend "fizzed" instead of fizzled
That sat out for too long, stirred or not. 
As the changes come with states of matter,
Metamorphosis took a solid into liquid. Since the milk is curdling, it might make sense to switch to "liquid into solid"
It is a glass of milk in a low operated fridge. 
It spoiled but not yet curdled - Thank God! The "Thank God!" seems sort of out of place? Why is it there?
My perspective is now setting in the familiarity,
As I walk and think about this friendly feeling. 
I'm flying solo, exploring my world. 
It can be quite interesting. 
But just like any ride, you sleep. 
Oh wells, no need to cry over spilled milk. 
Because this is my world, In this line and the line before it, both are really solid statements! You don't need "Because/Oh wells"
And I'll choose what to drink,
And most importantly, where to put it. 

Really lovely poem, with some great imagery!