IF YOU SEE KAY (A CHESSBERG)

[Psyve]

IF YOU SEE KAY (A CHESSBERG)


Our Tukid has ridden a Chessberg away
On a grammical Aziph turned down-
Your Chessberg’s an iceberg, the Queen tried to say,
But iceberg’s a nice burg to hang round!

The King has turned blind, disappointment and spite,
The tip of the iceberg and money;
The Queen’s awake, worried about mating all knight
On a diet of bread without Honey

So, if you see Kay, if you see our Kay,
If you see our Tukay-Tukid,
Tell her the Queen has abandoned the scene
Of the Save-our-King-from-himself bid!

Our Tukid’s a King, playing limited moves
On a board dominated by nights-
The Queen has been beating out timid tattoos,
Unheard, since she’s lost all her rights…

So, the King takes his ice and the Queen takes her song
To their separate beds every night,
Each trying to say, oh, if you see Kay,
I’m really feeling all right!
I’m feeling all right,
The feeling’s all right,
The Queen is all right,
The Queen was I…
I’m feeling all right…


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[Leanne]

Hey, fair go mate -- this site is about give and take, and so far you've posted as many threads demanding feedback as the pieces of feedback you've given others.  That's not the preferred ratio.  How about you lay off the posting your own stuff for a while and give something back to others?/  Admin

[Psyve]

Hi Leanne,

Thanks for your message above.  I wasn't really counting, as I thought I was participating on a fair basis across the various forums on this site.

Since you raise the subject though, this is my third posting of my work here for comment: (The other two are "Nov'57 to  March'80"  and "Appleweed")

Meanwhile I have  posted  feedback on:
1) A Block the strongest man couldn't budge
2) I swore I loved you at 3 in the morning on too much rum and ...
3) Like Leaves
4) Vespertine
5) Your 12th Winter

I have also participated  in discussions not involving my work  on:
6) Lord Randall/ A Hard Rains a gonna fall
7) I think he's a freaking genius

I hope I'm still on the right side of whatever ratio you are looking for.
Please let me know if you count differently.

Cheers

Psyve