Mud

[srijantje]

Mud huts
serene winter morning
sound of drones

[Erthona]

When I was married I also lived in a hut and heard a droning sound which surprisingly ended when I got divorced.

Mud hut, serene winter morning, I'm thinking the Serengeti with the Kilimanjaro in the distance. Yes, that's nice, one of the most primeval places on the earth being deflowered by advance war technology where people still live close to the earth, but die just as easily from a rocket as any other human. Ah, the "gods must be crazy."

You still in Europe being smothered by modern technology?


Dale

[just mercedes]

Good 'ku, bringing two worlds together. 'serene' doesn't feel right though. Is it just because it's an adjective? Not sure.

[srijantje]

yes you're right,mercedes

Mud huts
winter morning
sound of drones

no,Dale,I'm back in the mountains,just making a fire,sun coming up

[Erthona]

Lucky Bastard

dale

[srijantje]

RE: Mud
When I was married I also lived in a hut and heard a droning sound which surprisingly ended when I got divorced.
Dale

[RiverNotch]

bees sexing up
the winter? why put your ears
against a hive?

[bena]

mmmm a politiku. I like it! I even like serene because of its juxtaposition with what the drone represents. =)

love ya
mel

[ChristopherSea]

Very cool!    I was thinking that 'Muddy' might be a more poignant title that stresses the serene/drone contrast./Chris  

[reppindetroit]

Muddy definitely seems like a better title!

Loved the poem! Serene is great, maybe an even more powerful adjective could work in it's place.

Good luck!

[michael the tenant]

A great example of a haiku capturing a moment in time. Thanks.

[srijantje]

yeah,or dead children....excuse me

[bena]

gigglesnort.