The Next Stop

[Namyh]

The Next Stop 

High upon the pink hilltops, one breeze above the red treetops,

stars punctured night sprinkling clouds with purple hue

which caused the falling gold moonbeams

to filter down in almond streams

and flame my eyes with Beauty of an alien planet’s view.

There I was transfixed by majesty without conflict,

enrapt by a silence throbbing soundless at my ears

whose symphony made the colors thunder

across my eyes to wake from slumber

the Awe that senses flood to wonder what Architect worked here.

Then Dawn’s breathless yawning rippled pecan light thru morning

on my landcraft now approaching with its rush of silken roar.

Overhead, it passed a tree turned and landed close to me.

When I stepped inside, the capsule shut closed and sealed its door.

Up! Up! It whisked me. Ground fell from my feet,

passing clouds that hovered in the upper atmosphere

which stood as guard and sentry

‘gainst all outlaw cosmic entry

when my capsule docked so gently in my Starship, by my chair.

Automatic did the buckles strap my chest and legs and knuckles.

Jaws tensed, preparing for the up and coming jolt

in a silence made long lasting

'til I felt that rocket blasting.

Then, I closed my eyes. I took one breath, just before the bolt.

Straight to lightning warp-speed, thrown back in my seat,

control and throttle gauges blinked their lights upon my berth.

-Unzipped did I my flight suit.

-Unlatched my helmet's visor too

to read what was my next stop. Ahh! that planet they call Earth.

Namyh

[musicismylife78]

High upon the pink hilltops, one breeze above the red treetops,
stars punctured night sprinkling clouds with purple hue <-- Your description of the star-punctured sky is creative. Great job!
which caused the falling gold moonbeams
to filter down in almond streams
and flame my eyes with Beauty of an alien planet’s view.

There I was transfixed by majesty without conflict, <- this line flows extremely well, as does the next line.
enrapt by a silence throbbing soundless at my ears
whose symphony made the colors thunder
across my eyes to wake from slumber <-- the near rhyme between thunder and slumber adds a nice flavor
the Awe that senses flood to wonder what Architect worked here.

Then Dawn’s breathless yawning rippled pecan light thru morning
on my landcraft now approaching with its rush of silken roar.
Overhead, it passed a tree turned and landed close to me.
When I stepped inside, the capsule shut closed and sealed its door.

Up! Up! It whisked me. Ground fell from my feet, <- I'm not sure if the alliteration is purposeful here, but it sounds great!
passing clouds that hovered in the upper atmosphere <- "above the atmosphere" might flow a little better
which stood as guard and sentry
‘gainst all outlaw cosmic entry <- the rhythm of these two lines is beautiful
when my capsule docked so gently in my Starship, by my chair.

Automatic did the buckles strap my chest and legs and knuckles.
Jaws tensed, preparing for the up and coming jolt <- The word "jolt" literally jerks the rhythm of the poem. Good job.
in a silence made long lasting
'til I felt that rocket blasting.
Then, I closed my eyes. I took one breath, just before the bolt.

Straight to lightning warp-speed, thrown back in my seat,
control and throttle gauges blinked their lights upon my berth.
-Unzipped did I my flight suit.
-Unlatched my helmet's visor too <- Interesting use of dashes, but I'm not sure that I understand their purpose here?
to read what was my next stop. Ahh! that planet they call Earth.

I like your use of capitalization in this piece. I too like to emphasize meaning by capitalizing certain words. I think it's a creative way of inferring a secondary meaning. Great job.
The motif of the sky is interesting as well. I'm not sure that I understand the purpose of the Architect, however. You also mention different nuts a few times, which I'm unsure about. Could you elaborate on this please?
I hope some of my critique helped. I'd love to hear more from you. Thank you for sharing.

[Namyh]

Musicismylife - So very happy this made such a great impact for you. I used Architect instead of Almighty because it seemed more visual here for the purpose of planetry construction. Very glad you enjoyed its words and theme. Namyh