"Haiku" on a brook trout

[alatos]

I unhook
the mottled miracle
gulping in my palm. 

[just mercedes]

For me, 'miracle' is too abstract a term for the immediate tactile and visual sensation here.

[Tamara]

I unhook
the mottled miracle
gulping in my palm. 

I found the word choices too heavy for a haiku, especially 'mottled miracle' and 'gulping'.

[Magpie]

I agree that 'miracle' is too much of an abstract term for a haiku. Though I do like the image here and think that there is definite potential in it. I'm also thinking that it's not necessary to use 'mottled' and 'I unhook' is too personal for a haiku but you could say 'unhooking' which portrays the same thing as a scene from a more neutral perspective.
Just a couple of thoughts... As I say I do like the image and definitely think it could work.

Mark

[billy]

i like the idea of it. am with Jm about the miracle part.

an suggestion would be;

mottled brownie
gulps on my palm
unhooked

sadly any input in this forum looks like a rewrite

I unhook
the mottled miracle
gulping in my palm. 

[rayheinrich]

I unhook
the mottled miracle
gulping in my palm.

While I can't find a haiku using 'miracle', expressing emotion is common
(two involving fish):

Spring departs.
Birds cry
Fishes' eyes are filled with tears         ~ Basho

very exciting
yet after awhile so sad
cormorant fishing         ~ Basho

Considering the brevity of haiku; and, more importantly,
Japan's long tradition of co-operative writing; I think
it's reasonable, when necessary, to critique it by re-write.
Not that this is that close, but:

poor fish
gulping in my hand
you belong in the water  

'I'*, however, is not infrequently used by the haiku masters.
It's how you use it that counts. The "I" above, imho, more than
meets the criteria.

Why? Haiku isn't about nature specifically, it is about women's/men's
interaction with it. A poem is never written by nature, it requires
someone to observe, to experience, and then to record it using language.

That said, one of the 'high' purposes of haiku is to connect us with nature,
to have us realize that we are not apart from it, but are a part of it.

*
I’m a wanderer
so let that be my name –
the first winter rain           ~ Basho

After killing
a spider, how lonely I feel
in the cold of night!         ~ Shiki

the tree cut,
dawn breaks early
at my little window         ~ Shiki

[Mwaba don]

I unhook
the mottled miracle
gulping in my palm. 

I have known Haiku's to be simple, Yours seems a little complicated to me. (May be the words mottled miracle).