I Wish by William Marsland.
#1


My little sister liked swimming with the fishes,
though we have none down the well.
She loved to really sing out loud,
I heard it in her yell.

My little sister always had her puppy by her side,
she never let me play with it, told mommy that I lied.
Now they both swim with the non-existent fishes
and I have my own little puppy. Confused
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#2
Nice title LOL Big Grin

Hmm... the only thing I would maybe change is that ending line. It breaks the rhythm of the rest of your poem,, and I think there's a way you can say you "inherited" the puppy but in a funnier maybe slightly tangential way.

Quite a black comedy piece Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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#3
the puppy went to the same place the little girl did Tongue

but i see what you mean about the last line. it does feel a little forced.
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#4
Ha! Big Grin

It's not bad though. A little tweaking will do wonders Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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