My Aching Belly

[JMSelden]

O, My Aching Belly
I shall slow on taking jelly
Or maybe twas the tea
Either way, pitiful me
Over time the Ache'll flee
And I, over time, free

[rowens]

You say you're going to free something? Maybe that's what you need. There's not much to say.

[Leanne]

I was enjoying it right up until that awkward last line, which is a shame since the last line should be the most memorable. Because of the odd syntax I'm not entirely sure what you mean to say -- is it something like "and in time I'll be free"?

[LorettaYoung]

I was enjoying it right up until that awkward last line, which is a shame since the last line should be the most memorable. Because of the odd syntax I'm not entirely sure what you mean to say -- is it something like "and in time I'll be free"?

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I would just suggest that you think about a more interesting subject. Good luck, Loretta