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[jeremyyoung]

The whores shoe above the door
was lucky for him but not for her,
wet, limp, stocking home,
slanket snug, a bite of flake.

Bolly pink, to light the way,
roses red, candy, grasps the stay
held up for atom blasted dish,
cellophane, well sauced neck.

Their cells re-connect: with coloured fangs,
nice chicken, pings, as love songs
carry plates to knees,
Ikea rug, rice drops fly.

Unshooed haw frost spores the door.
Yays to the right, into her
life of Hartley's jam, headland spread,
diet days, two bars on.

[Gilberte]

Like the the double meaning at the beginning (Whores shoe/horseshoe). First line…clever! I don't understand all of it but think this can be published on the right website. It's heavily sexual yet confusing but I don't know that I need to understand all of it. Not sure About the last stanza "Unshooed haw frost spores the door./Yays to the right" I am imagining that it is a frosty winter and things are frozen in strange shapes. What does that mean? There is a feeling of a prostitute or loose woman who is unhappy with her sordid life. The randomness of the poem works for me. I see many modern images like the diet, two bars on, even though there is obscurity (what is a slanket slug?)
I can see some people not relating to this poem as it is indeed obscure and off the wall but I can relate to the raw imagery. Maybe you could title it "Bolly pink to light the way"?

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"Speak less than thou knowest" - Shakespeare

[jeremyyoung]

Thanks Gilberte

A slanket is a blanket with sleeves - http://www.slanket.co.uk/