Planting Season

[Erthona]

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At nature's insistent pleading,
brash stamens and lovely lobelias,
the youngest, the freshest,
flow gracefully outside,
under fractured ice crystal stars,
and reading lamp moon,
as only graceful, supple,
young limbs can:
away from the fixed focus,
of the mature weighted down
stalwart stems and petulant petals.
Taking only the echo of music with them
trysting, touching, exploring,
moving in and out of
the moon shadow,
as breathing and pulses
increase rhythmically,
effortlessly struggling,
climbing the peaking ecstasy that howls
through their thin trembling tender shoots,
giving over to liberating libations
of needful nectar,
and low lyrical cooing.

[billy]

of needful nectar indeed,
i want to be a plant.

[Erthona]

We all want to get planted sometime!

Dale

[ChristopherSea]

Dale I share your passion for gardening. You have me chomping at the bit for Spring with this lovely piece! This Winter is my season of discontent with it's early rage, record low temperatures and mounting snow fall. Thank you for the distraction and harsh reminder that there are still more than two dreadful months before planting season!

[milo]

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At natures insistent pleading,
brash stamens and lovely lobelias,
the youngest, the freshest,
flow gracefully outside,
under fractured ice crystal stars,
and reading lamp moon,
as only graceful, supple,
young limbs can:
away from the fixed focus,
of the mature weighted down
stalwart stems and petulant petals.
Taking only the echo of music with them
trysting, touching, exploring,
moving in and out of
the moon shadow,
as breathing and pulses
increase rhythmically,
effortlessly struggling,
climbing the peaking ecstasy that howls
through their thin trembling tender shoots,
giving over to liberating libations
of needful nectar,
and low lyrical cooing.

Nature's

[Erthona]

Thanks Milo, good catch. Have corrected.
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Your welcome Chris. Thank you

Dale

[kindofahippy]

Dale I share your passion for gardening. You have me chopping at the bit for Spring with this lovely piece! This Winter is my season of discontent with it's early rage, record low temperatures and mounting snow fall. Thank you for the distraction and harsh reminder that there are still more than two dreadful months before planting season!

It's already spring down here in the south, and my plants are getting along just fine.

[Obadiah Grey]

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At nature's insistent pleading,
brash stamens and lovely lobelias,
the youngest, the freshest,
flow gracefully outside,
under fractured ice crystal stars,
and reading lamp moon,
as only graceful, supple,
young limbs can:
away from the fixed focus,
of the mature weighted down
stalwart stems and petulant petals.
Taking only the echo of music with them
trysting, touching, exploring,
moving in and out of
the moon shadow,
as breathing and pulses
increase rhythmically,
effortlessly struggling,
climbing the peaking ecstasy that howls
through their thin trembling tender shoots,
giving over to liberating libations
of needful nectar,
and low lyrical cooing.

I found your use of punctuation strange and slightly off putting.
The use of "moon shadow",,,, well, betchya can't guess who that made me think of.
Thought it very good other than the points above.

Obi.

[Erthona]

"well, betchya can't guess who that made me think of."

"I'm being followed by a moonshadow, moonshadow, moonshadow..."

Nope, haven't a clue.
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If you could specify which "punctuation strange and slightly off putting" and why, if you don't mind taking the time, that would be a great help (Although, certainty not required as this is not in serious workshopping, so should you choose to do so it would be above and beyond).

Either way I appreciate your comments,

Thanks,

Dale