Find the pieces

[gravity1665]

Determined to find the pieces
which broke off each in turn,
determined to continue–
failing to fix them in place.

Rigid in mind, a forgotten soul
may prove a suffering strife
as freshness comes freely to those
who let go.

What is left behind is someone
you quite clearly fail to see,
searching for those fragments
ground away like sand.

Afraid to shed a skin or two
strip down to bare foundations.
This vessel you now occupy, disconnected
from the core.

[rowens]

If the poem is supposed to show broken pieces, lost fragments and stripped foundations, it at least does that.

[gravity1665]

If the poem is supposed to show broken pieces, lost fragments and stripped foundations, it at least does that.

Yeah I should probably have put the quote which inspired my poem up as well eh? well here it is.

"...that just when it looks like life is falling apart, it may be
falling together for the first time." - Neale Donald Walsch

[ellajam]

If the poem is supposed to show broken pieces, lost fragments and stripped foundations, it at least does that.

Yeah I should probably have put the quote which inspired my poem up as well eh? well here it is.

"...that just when it looks like life is falling apart, it may be
falling together for the first time."

Hi, gravity, welcome.

It's best when writing off an inspiration to not depend on it to carry your work. Try putting it aside and see it you poem makes sense on it's own.

If you'e going to post the quote you need to credit it. You can add the author by clicking edit on your post.

Again, welcome.