toddling
#1
Two steps,
four-
three steps--
one more.
Uh-oh-
FLOOR!
A graze on the knee
cause for a scream?
swift look around
no sympathy found
no use in a cry
here goes another try.

Four steps,
two--
one step-
a loose shoe,
wobbLE..
POOH!
Same damn knee
stupid dungarees
the fit's appalling
no wonder I'm falling
Right. Up. Let's get this done
I'll show that Mum!

One-two-three,
W-wait--
whooaa
Fivesixseveneight
AH!!
Safety gate!
That's it! I've had enough
this walking thing is tough!
Time to get fed
then a spell in bed...
Where is that woman?
This isn't a spa
...wwwwwaaaahhhhhh...
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#2
Lol too cute
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#3
Very much enjoyed the simplicity of this, there is a lot for everyone to relate to in this and the ending made me chuckle. Best Keith

If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
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#4
i enjoyed the read a lot, loved how you imbued it with slow and fast
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#5
Very fun read Smile
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#6
It was nice how the rhythm of the words matched what was happening in the story.

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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#7
Well done - your readers finish the poem with a feeling of attainment!
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