The garden of eden

[Keith]

Warm summer nights,
ready salted,
outside the pub
on a worn down step,
glass coke bottle
and two thin straws.

[Erthona]

I don't get the "ready salted" phrase, but I suspect that has to do with my lack of knowledge. Otherwise, very succinct.

Dale

[just mercedes]

Ready salted - the chips? Nice snapshot of time and place. I like the warm/worn sounds and the suggestion of intimacy in two thin straws.

[Keith]

I don't get the "ready salted" phrase, but I suspect that has to do with my lack of knowledge. Otherwise, very succinct.

Dale

Thanks Dale The ready salted bit is a packet of crisps.Best Keith

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Right or wrong, my first thought was that salty taste skins takes when it perspires all day. This was reinforced with the shared cola on a stoop. Hopefully that's what you were going for. If not, ignore me for I know my mind is a trifle warped.

AND I left out that I found it charming, a little sentimental, and it makes me think of childhood.

Thanks BedsideFungus I was going fr crisps and coke on a step with a maybe someone else. Glad you liked it best Keith.

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Ready salted - the chips? Nice snapshot of time and place. I like the warm/worn sounds and the suggestion of intimacy in two thin straws.

Thanks JM, you have it all, and this is still my favorite combo. Best Keith

[billy]

cheapskate a suggestion would be walkers ready salted.

[Keith]

cheapskate a suggestion would be walkers ready salted.

I've always been cheap and easy to please, Walkers could work it is the brand leader but it could imply walkers and in my head its a child sat on the step, but see now I also like that walkers works on two levels, oh I dunno I need some coke and crisps. Thanks Billy

[Keith]

The last line plays into the title nicely. I like the regional flair of this.

Thanks fogglethorpe much appreciated. Best Keith

[LickinLyrics]

No input on the poem, I didn't read into any of it. I'm tired and it's late lol and Im knew to the site, but I really like how everyone is very active and gives good input!

[Keith]

No input on the poem, I didn't read into any of it. I'm tired and it's late lol and Im knew to the site, but I really like how everyone is very active and gives good input!

I am glad to hear you like the site, I do too

[bena]

I missed this somehow. It's just an absolute spectacular memory photo. thanks for sharing it with us.

luh,
mel.

[Keith]

Many thanks bena for the kind words, I have sat on many a pubs backdoor step facing the garden, Ah happy days. Best Keith