Separation trauma

[Keith]

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Baby orca moved,
mothers long range whale song,
trainers breath held accountable.



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Baby orca SeaWorld slave,
mothers long range whale song,
trainer held on the bottom.

[ChristopherSea]

A sad but true story captured nicely in this short-form Keith!

[Keith]

A sad but true story captured nicely in this short-form Keith!

Thanks Chris sorry I had missed your comment. Best Keith

[cheyrn]

It's sad on several levels.

In my extra humble opinion, the word "the" should be removed from the last line.

[Keith]

It's sad on several levels.

In my extra humble opinion, the word "the" should be removed from the last line.

Thanks Cheyrn I will have a think about your suggestion. Keith

[billy]

Baby orca SeaWorld slave,
mothers long range whale song,
trainer held on the bottom.

not sure seaworld slave is needed as the trainer held on the bottom is the image that tells us it's sea world. or at least an outdoor aquarium.

captures the moment and puts the plight of such animals on show.

[Keith]

Baby orca SeaWorld slave,
mothers long range whale song,
trainer held on the bottom.

not sure seaworld slave is needed as the trainer held on the bottom is the image that tells us it's sea world. or at least an outdoor aquarium.

captures the moment and puts the plight of such animals on show.

I agree Billy I will have think, thanks