Ambiguity Defined

[Charlesjoseph]

(edit 1, Chris, Cloudy)


Ambiguity Defined

Hawking lost God in a black hole,
Goswami found him with Quantum Physics.

Sally lost God when the baby died,
Jimmy found him after the needle.

I've lost God many times,
but never found his equal.



(original)

Ambiguity Defined

Stephen lost God in a black hole,
Amit found him with Quantum Physics.

Sally lost God when the baby died,
Billy found him after the needle.

I've lost God many times,
but never found his equal.

[ChristopherSea]

Insanity Defined

Steven lost God in a black hole,
Amit found him with Quantum Physics.

Sally lost God when the baby died,
Billy found him after the needle.

I've lost God many times,
but never found his equal.



Not sure if i'm happy with the form any suggestions?

Chazz, I like it, but you may have to further identify those folks to grasp the lines and feel the full effect. I am assuming Stephen Hawking for the blackhole, but you spelled the first name differently, and Amit Goswami for Quantum Physics. However, Sally and Billy are guesses or generic and have less weight. I would use full names for them for impact (e.g., Lenny Bruce or John Belushi fit the needle). Not sure about the miscarrige, but it's easy enough to find a famous one. As for the title, it is not so insane to me. It is more like 'Ambiguity Defined'. Cheers/Chris

[Charlesjoseph]

Insanity Defined

Steven lost God in a black hole,
Amit found him with Quantum Physics.

Sally lost God when the baby died,
Billy found him after the needle.

I've lost God many times,
but never found his equal.



Not sure if i'm happy with the form any suggestions?

Chazz, I like it, but you may have to further identify those folks to grasp the lines and feel the full effect. I am assuming Stephen Hawking for the blackhole, but you spelled the first name differently, and Amit Goswami for Quantum Physics. However, Sally and Billy are guesses or generic and have less weight. I would use full names for them for impact (e.g., Lenny Bruce or John Belushi fit the needle). Not sure about the miscarrige, but it's easy enough to find a famous one. As for the title, it is not so insane to me. It is more like 'Ambiguity Defined'. Cheers/Chris

Hey Chris,
You got it. Stephen was a typo. I began putting their full names and then retracted but i like your suggestion. Makes sense. The title was not set in stone. So, i think i'll also steal your title idea. 'Ambiguity Defined' Thanks for the help Sir,
Chazz

[justcloudy]

I really like this Chazz. I agree with Chris on the title, but I'm not sure if I agree with his point about finding famous figures for S2... but I'm not really into obscure references. I think Sally and Billy as generics are fine. Sally is such a goody-two-shoes name which fits, so maybe as a contrast you could change "Billy" to something a bit more... imposing? Badass? You get my drift. ;p

Anyway it's short but it does the trick. Nicely done.

[Charlesjoseph]

I really like this Chazz. I agree with Chris on the title, but I'm not sure if I agree with his point about finding famous figures for S2... but I'm not really into obscure references. I think Sally and Billy as generics are fine. Sally is such a goody-two-shoes name which fits, so maybe as a contrast you could change "Billy" to something a bit more... imposing? Badass? You get my drift. ;p

Anyway it's short but it does the trick. Nicely done.

Thanks cloudy
Im gonna edit it in the morning. I'm still not set on the full name/ first name only thing I think ill do it both ways and post them up to see what the consensus is.
Later on,
Chazz

[Charlesjoseph]

Ok first edit up

I tried last names in 1 i think people can/will research the names if need be. in 2 it's more like non famous humans who also struggle with the big question. Let me know what you think.