The Deep End

[FatalBanana]

I feel myself falling
off the pier into the white
a man once said
it felt like drowning
well I'm starting to think he's right
and though I know I'll forget when I get older
it doesn't feel like tonight

so I just swim
into the deep end
let the guilt wash over me
like a storm covered ceiling
I know this feeling
it doesn't feel right
I'll let this ocean
be my bed tonight

the seas a violent hue
six miles deep and dark blue
I draw the lines
the fishes dance
as they swim the path askew

I feel the breaking levy
weighted, ankle tied and heavy
the mouth opens wide
the tide pulls high
the lines stretched thin

so I swim
into the deep end
let the flood rush over me
like a storm colored ceiling
I know this feeling
it doesn't feel right
I'll let this ocean
be my bed tonight

my tongue may taste of salt
my clothes heavy and rung
but the fact remains
seasons never change
I need you like water in my lungs...

I feel like I'm falling
off the pier
into the deep
you once said you loved me
but I am nothing but salt in your sea

so I swim
into the deep end
let you cover over me
like a storm covered ceiling
I know this feeling
it feels so right
I'll let this ocean
be my bed tonight

[Viktor Vaughn]

First thing, I love to see good solid punctuation in a poem. It helps it to read better, and the reader doesn't have to guess if you're still on the same idea, or sentence, etc. And also capitalisation where appropriate (after a full stop for instance).
I feel myself falling
off the pier into the white The white what? White foamy water? White light at the end of a tunnel? It's too vague, so the reader gets confused (at least, this one does).
a man once said
it felt like drowning
well I'm starting to think he's right
and though I know I'll forget when I get older
it doesn't feel like tonight It almost feels like 'tonight' is forced, just to make the rhyme. It doesn't make me feel or see anything really.

so I just swim
into the deep end
let the guilt wash over me Why are you guilty?
like a storm covered ceiling I like the sounds of this line
I know this feeling
it doesn't feel right I'd try to avoid using the word 'feel' while describing 'feeling'. Be creative! A variety of words creates a deeper image.
I'll let this ocean
be my bed tonight

the seas a violent hue
six miles deep and dark blue I like 'six miles deep'. Makes me think of six feet deep, which adds to a slightly dark tone to the poem, which is what I am feeling from it
I draw the lines Lines as in boundaries? Or what? Again, I'm not too sure what you're trying to say
the fishes dance
as they swim the path askew Doesn't really read well to me, and these last two lines seem unnecessary. They don't really add much

I feel the breaking levy
weighted, ankle tied and heavy
the mouth opens wide
the tide pulls high
the lines stretched thin

so I swim
into the deep end
let the flood rush over me
like a storm colored ceiling
I know this feeling
it doesn't feel right
I'll let this ocean
be my bed tonight Interesting changes with the words in this stanza. 'Guilt wash' becomes 'flood rush', 'storm covered' becomes 'storm coloured'. I kind of like it, because it's a change, but it doesn't really add much for me. Try to make it more meaningful. Why is it a flood now, and not guilt? Why is it storm coloured, and not covered? The way it is now almost seems as if you're changing it for the sake of changing it, with no real intention.

my tongue may taste of salt
my clothes heavy and rung
but the fact remains
seasons never change
I need you like water in my lungs... The whole stanza reads a bit poorly. Forced rhymes, don't really understand the mentioning of the seasons here, as it doesn't follow the whole 'ocean imagery' going on

I feel like I'm falling
off the pier
into the deep
you once said you loved me
but I am nothing but salt in your sea This line is a bit lengthy the way I'm reading it. Change 'I am' to "I'm". Even then, it still seems one syllable too many

so I swim
into the deep end
let you cover over me
like a storm covered ceiling
I know this feeling
it feels so right
I'll let this ocean
be my bed tonight The changes to the words in this stanza make a bit more sense because you set it up that way (talking about the relationship). Good.

Some good images in there, just needs some editing. And punctuation and capitalisation!

Just curious, is this for a song? You seem to have a verse-chorus structure going on.