Death and Dying

[milo]

More than one member has been banned immediately after complimenting me.

While I'm still thinking about it: I used to think girls didn't want to come home with me after dinner because I was unattractive. Now I think it's because they simply needed somewhere to shit.

This might be a little far out there but maybe the girls didn't want to be banned right after coming home with you.

[rowens]

They should though, I used to pay good money for those dinners. Now all I have is bad money nobody wants.

[Jeffrey Gibson]

I'm often as off putting as they come.

OK. But that hardly answers my question. What linguistic or sonic or metrical elements and/or concrete appeals to the senses that are generally thought to be characteristic of poetry and which distinguish it from prose, appear here? What is it here that makes your piece a poem rather than a journal entry?

(for the definition of journal entry and how and why it is distinct from a poem, see Howard Miller's note here

link removed /mod

You don't need to link to inferior poetry boards to make your point. Use your words.

that's in response to a submission that in form and wording is very much like yours. Warning: Miller doesn't mince words).

Jeffrey

[rowens]

There aren't many of those things you ask about in this. I use the word 'many' a few too many times near the beginning though, maybe I can count that as something.

Do you have any opinions distinct from second-hand sources, or do you just do summaries with appropriate links?

[ChristopherSea]

http://www.go-girl.com

This can be used indoors and has the reservoir: http://www.amazon.com/Lumex-3214-Female-..._1?ie=UTF8&qid=1380988726&sr=8-1&keywords=female+urinal

[milo]

I'm often as off putting as they come.

OK. But that hardly answers my question. What linguistic or sonic or metrical elements and/or concrete appeals to the senses that are generally thought to be characteristic of poetry and which distinguish it from prose, appear here? What is it here that makes your piece a poem rather than a journal entry?

(for the definition of journal entry and how and why it is distinct from a poem, see Howard Miller's note here

link removed /mod

You don't need to link to inferior poetry boards to make your point. Use your words.

that's in response to a submission that in form and wording is very much like yours. Warning: Miller doesn't mince words).

Jeffrey

We ask that members not link off site unless necessary, just summarize your finding.
Also, leanne is the only subject matter expert recognized by the court.

[Erthona]

I think more people should like you poems. I would but I too afraid of dying, or is that masturbating? At a certain age , one is much the same as the other!

Despite the fact that you protest to having 4th world accommodations, yet retain 1st world telecommunications, I do think the going to pee outside automatically causes the reader to wonder about why that is, and throws them out of the poem. I do think you should retain the peeing outside, I just think you should find a clever way around the problem.

What is really nice about this piece is that, while it is merely satire to some, it is reality for others! A twofer!

Dale

[rowens]

I could go back and find if it's ever been explained in any of my other writings why people always go outside, and use that in this poem. Because they always do.

The best reason so far is that most of the people in my poems are drunk. Which is always the best excuse for everything, especially the poems themselves.

Maybe those people that come sit down next to me on a bench and just start talking should be my target audience.

[Jeffrey Gibson]

We ask that members not link off site unless necessary, just summarize your finding.
Also, leanne is the only subject matter expert recognized by the court.

Got it. Thanks!

Jeffrey

[Malu]

What do you mean, interesting? I just had a partial lobotomy.

Interesting as in your prediction, I'm sure you had a great laugh along with chris as for your partial lobotomy, I hope you are doing well now

[ChristopherSea]

What do you mean, interesting? I just had a partial lobotomy.

Interesting as in your prediction, I'm sure you had a great laugh along with chris as for your partial lobotomy, I hope you are doing well now

I should be able to comment on what someone else says.

[rowens]

I thought it was agreed this poem was dead when it got moved out of the Important Threads. Though I don't know how it got there in the first place. I don't think I'm able to post there.

[Apophrades]

haha why is there so much tension between you two. and rowens, loving the humour!

[ChristopherSea]

haha why is there so much tension between you two. and rowens, loving the humour!

There's none between rowens and I, it's with some troll.

[ellajam]

Death, Dying and Resurrection.

[milo]

Death, Dying and Resurrection.

Are we doing Easter or zombies? (Jesus Christ was original zombie)

[rowens]

If we're still around next spring, there might be some Resurrection poems. Right now, I'm sinking deeper into the fall.

I've always found it strange that Christ was born on Christmas and died right before Easter. He was only alive a few months. But he sure knew how to use his time wisely.