Itchy Alcohol

[bluebird]

It's terrible. The Itch.
So hard to ignore.
Ignore.
Ignore.
Ignore .
Emanates from my core.
Spreads through my chest
and down my arms.
Till my finger tips.

I fight it. The Itch.
So hard to resist.
Resist.
Resist.
Resist .
Resist I must.
With such weapons
as Will and Power.
Till I am spent.

I indulge a bit. The Itch.
So pleasurable to rub.
Rub.
Rub.
Rub .
Just a little bit.
Against good conscience
and better judgement.
For a tiny little scratch.

It's raging now. The Itch.
So great to scratch.
Scratch.
Scratch.
Scratch.
Bring it on!
Glorious battle with
me and the itch.
Till kingdom come.

All bloodied now. The Itch.
So wasted and sick.
Sick
Sick
Sick
I care not now.
The party goes on
and on and on.
Till tomorrow never comes.

It won. The Itch.
So bruised and guilty.
Guilt.
Guilt.
Guilt.
Never will I indulge.
Will never let this itch
make me its bitch.
Till forever and after.

It's terrible. The Itch.
So hard to ignore.
Ignore.
Ignore.
Ignore .
Emanates from my core.
Spreads through my chest
and down my arms.
Till my finger tips.

-- Bluebird

[Vistaldust]

As a friend of Bill W, can certainly relate to this poem. I like it naturally. It speaks my language. It's a great metaphor, Bluebird. Each stanza offers a building crescendo. Work with that. Refine it by flavoring it up even more. Look for where you can take a sentence and add a little more imaginative imagery to express the same idea. Nice work!

[hardon]

I know this feel too, and although metaphors are for jerks I really like this poem too. It's that fine line between addiction and making an actual choice, it's hard to tell the difference sometimes. Shit just happens. I felt this poem was really solid as it takes off strong, keeps a steady pace and ends strong too I wouldn't add or take away anything just refine like Vistaldust said.

[Malu]

Great story a lot of us can relate to, I really liked the form and style of this poem. Maybe just add a more descriptions, thanks for the good read!

[SimikPK]

Nice one, but the word "glorious" doesnt work for me. You describe it as an upleasant struggle, showing that your attitude is rather negative. What about "tedious battle" (just fired away the very first idea)?

[makeshift]

Reading this makes me itch lol

I do like the metaphor its simple but effective. While I have never felt addiction to alcohol I can certainly relate to the notion of itchyness, this reminded me a lot of the times i've had poison ivy.I think the short sentences, small lines and repetition support your theme pretty well. There is something frantic to it that suggest an uneasy mind. I did find the inconsistent use of periods in the parts where you repeat the same word distracting. Im not sure if I liked "sick" just because it felt like it was more direct to the idea of Alcohol then the rest of the metaphorical language. Enjoyed reading (:

[Versify]

the battle of addiction is a brilliant topic, and so wonderfully characterized as a nuisance of an itch that one knows it should not scratch but can't stop. the feeling is overwhelming with pleasure and pain. you've shown that well with the progression of the poem. I like how you brought back the first stanza at the very end, possibly alluding toward hope? its a good piece.