Faith in the Greenwich God...a rewrite for trueenigma

[tectak]

The chaps were shooting champagne bottles, drinking hard on God’s rest day;
while one dry mile across the meadow, Devil Dancers pranced and flew.
A red thread flickered thin and broken; adder on a hot highway.
Haze turned the rippling sky-line smoggy, forcing eyes to rise to blue.

Copper light brought mis-hit curses; one by one the guns went dead.
Above, like heron’s wings unfolding, the brownish smoke teared eyes turned wild
and hid the sun in feathery pluming. All around the land turned red.
The snake came winding down the hillside; crackling demon, Satan’s child.

We ran to where the Shogun shimmered, quite hot in the swirling ash,
with crimson flames painted all on her, looking like she knew her fate.
We’re running, running, over tinder; lungs were cooking in the dash.
Twice I fell and twice recovered; I ran ‘til someone screamed “Too late!”

A vengeful blast of heat roared forward, hit me like an angry moose.
This being Sunday, good God found me; struck me down and peeled my eyes,
singed off my hair and left me naked. Burned quite bad, He cut me loose.
Old Lucifer, you could not get me, so I beat the Prince of Lies.

Lingua in Maxilla For trueenigma
tectak today.
Should I move this to novice?

[Erthona]

"Should I move this to novice?" Yes!

"chaps" are something you wear on your legs so the bushes don't sting you.

Chaps often shoot champagne bottles do they? They hate the French that much?

"Shogun" a bicycle?

"angry moose"? Really? Shades of Teddy!

This is almost funny.

Dale

[tectak]

"Should I move this to novice?" Yes!

"chaps" are something you wear on your legs so the bushes don't sting you.

Chaps often shoot champagne bottles do they? They hate the French that much?

"Shogun" a bicycle?

"angry moose"? Really? Shades of Teddy!

This is almost funny.

Dale

Thank god...it is supposed to be almost funny!
Whooshh!

[Truerenigma]

I don't see how this is any more our less deserving of serious than the last one. I actually think it's a little bit better. Besides, you said Greenwich, which lets us know exactly where it's at and is a little different than saying faith in the British god, which would have made me wonder if he /god/ looked like jason statham, and Shogun would have made us wonder if you were talking about Hong Kong a few decades back, or who knows what colony, but still, how is "faith and God in Greenwich" not better? Or even faith,god and Greenwich. Heaven's sake! America's a big place! and the /god/ american? As if Jesus where nailed to the cross by pneumatic Black n Decker roofing gun! As if his last name were Washington! It's like saying God is an American. Really? Care to elaborate?

And you didn't specify where in america.you didn't say texan God (lol imagine that!) Or mid western god (gods a farmer and wears overalls) or californiano God (is Arnold Schwarzenegger God then)?
So who is this God who is American? Barack Obama? Scary thought!

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If you would have said "faith in the Irish God" I would wonder if he were catholic or protestant. It's enough to start a war over!

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If you said faith in the English God, I would pour a glass of wine and settle in, prepare myself for an interesting narrative or speech, in the voice of Queen Elizabeth. I'll leave it there.